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jaxjoy
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since 1999-12-14
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0 posted 2000-01-04 08:26 PM





I stood alone
on your
shore's edge.
Waiting.
Wanting
for you to pull me
into your depths.

Many moons
have passed.
Tides high,
Tides low.
Still I wait
Alone.

Your waters touched me,
teased me,
took advantage
of my gentle presence.
I consoled
your troubled waters.
Embraced
your fury.
But
on your shore's edge,
I stood alone.


© Copyright 2000 Jacqueline Vachier - All Rights Reserved
Bojopy
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 391

1 posted 2000-01-04 08:33 PM


Wonderful image..... great read....Bojopy


 



Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
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2 posted 2000-01-04 09:53 PM


What a lovely, sad poem!  I feel very close ties to the sea and love the feel of this, plus the underlying, hidden meanings as well.

Corinne

jaxjoy
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since 1999-12-14
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3 posted 2000-01-04 11:09 PM


Thank you!  glad you like!
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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4 posted 2000-01-05 12:25 PM


Applauding, well written free verse, I really enjoyed this  
Denise
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5 posted 2000-01-05 11:05 AM


This is so sad and beautiful! Well done!

 Denise


tulip
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6 posted 2000-01-05 11:02 PM


What great imagery!  Nicely written!
Severn
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7 posted 2000-01-06 12:38 PM


jax - this is wonderful! Excellent imagery...

K

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

8 posted 2000-01-06 08:50 AM


I enjoyed your analogy between the sea and the relationship..being taken for granted or left alone is very much like standing on the shore...just on the edge...but close enough to feel the ocean's breath.

Dear LadyClaire

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9 posted 2004-08-16 12:25 PM


dang...
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