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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Twenty-five years ago I walked down the aisle In a gown of white velvet With a painted on smile. I wish you could know The "me" I was then Much less world weary (And certainly more thin!) I still lived illusions, Allowed myself dreams... Within hours I learned Delusions and schemes. I pity that girl. For with one bad choice, She lost herself, Her beliefs, and her voice. And yet the path That gave her such pain Brought me to today And all that I've gained. For I would not trade One tear that I've shed One night alone Or one prayer that I've pled If happiness then Would have circumvented My chance to know you. I would not have prevented That poor girl's anguish... For the woman I am Was born from the ashes Of that life - that sham. And this woman's wise Enough to cherish The man that you are... This love will not perish! Thank you, my dear friend, With each day, you show A man worthy of my trust I'm so proud to know... The finest man ever! I'm glad to be here And finally release The past twenty-five years. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Some of the best lessons are taught with blood and tears--Great poem and I wish you much future happiness. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
this is beautifully constructed suthern, and the flow of emotions is great...I love this...and yep I know what you mean, as much as we might be inclined to lament the past...it is our today....am glad to see you accept yours and prosper  |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
My friend: I wish I could take away your sorrow, your pain and your past but in a way I think our past pain makes for special people and without doubt, you're one of life's special people... You know it always makes me smile because I think you're beautiful and the radiance of goodness and compassion that is inside you shines right through...and that will last the whole of your lifetime and gives pleasure to all the people that you touch...they come away having touched love! Been loved and maybe take a little of that love to keep with them forever! Ooops..I'm crying HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Belle, Would you please refrain from writing any more poems about how wonderful I am... I know, I know, I know... everybody might think you were writing about that scalawag rascal, but WE know, don't we? *wink* Incidently, this was a great poem about your life - |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
LongJohn....you're so perceptive! And humble too!........I saw your post on the adult board......it would take a "cat of nine tails" to cover such an ass as you have!!! LOL |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Suthern...I think this may be the best yet from ya..... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ROFL!! "The best from you yet...." from Toerag 'cause he thinks it's about him. Well, let him keep his little fantasy. It IS one of your best, Suthern, and I am humbled.... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Martie: Thank you! Lovey: Laments are inevitable... but I wouldn't trade my "todays" for an easy past! *G* RG: Methinks you're biased, dear friend... not that I mind at all! *G* Stay that way... but stop crying! LOL LJA: Shhhh... Lor will skin me alive! LOL. Thanks, scalawag! *G* Toerag: You know better than anyone what your encouragement and support have done for my writing... Thank you isn't nearly enough... but I do thank you! Balladeer: Toe is a very wise man. *G* And I'm not known for my subtlety! LOL. Thanks, 'Deer one... very much! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 01-04-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Suthern! So well said! Denise |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
We cannot be born without labor... can we auntie? Peace.. very nice How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, Denise and LR! *G* I do appreciate all of your kind comments so very much! |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Damn, I'm late ... every possible comment has already been made ... maybe I should ditto them all ? ... Superb poem Auntie !! ... and LR, "We cannot be born without labor", you're talking about your mum here ! ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
That's okay, Froggie... better late than never! SMOOCH! And thank you! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Suthern...beautiful. The title caught me on this piece for this simple reason: Out of the Ashes (Also titled The Phoenix) ~Ruth Charred ashes lay in a pile where once were burning embers. Dreams are discarded in the soot, buried amidst hurt and shame. What is left after the fire is gone and nothing else remains? Only me, lost and alone, a little worse for wear, tattered and torn, but still intact. I pick myself up again, brush away the soot and grime. Out of the ashes comes life; and I have been resurrected. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hoot: That's beautiful! I've noticed before that we have more in common than a name... *S* Thanks for sharing your poem! Ruth |
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