Open Poetry #5 |
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I yearn to write... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA ![]() |
I yearn to write and yet my hand does shake, < !signature-->I cannot capture what I felt on paper. Your lips mixed with the fountain water make Great Expectations seem much greater! We stood above The Twins, as though two giants, And mocked the golden bull without a fear, Believing there was nothing real in science We held on tight to what we felt was dear. The time flew quickly on the Cupid’s wings And caught us while we too, were flying. That heart is strongest which forever sings, And love grows greater, not afraid of dying. A mirror shattered like a broken heart Reflections scattered, but not one did part. I fell in love and kept on falling [This message has been edited by Master (edited 01-05-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Master! And, like you, I also yearn to write, only difference is....you have! ![]() ![]() Denise |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Thanks Master I really enjoyed the way this came together, Beautiful! Reminds me of one I have'nt posted yet, better get on it. The title that is. Paul |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Beautiful, I love those last two lines. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wow, I liked this. This person has definitely been in love Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Yes!!! Powerful and moving piece. Well done ![]() |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Very strong words here. I like! ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you everyone, some of the things in this one are very personal so don't try to make sense out of it. Thank you for responding! |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
WOW!!!!!! those last two lines were extremely good.....dont get me wrong the rest was good too.....overall a great poem......thanks for the read..........Bojopy |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you Bojopy! glad you liked it! |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
lovely, my Master...(LOL) memories always hold, don't they? |
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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
Beautiful poem, captured some deep feelings. Deborah |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
hmmm...perhaps you should include more of the personal in your writing, then. Love this, it is excellent ![]() It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Kid Pedestal Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 26Chandler, Arizona |
In the wake of this piece, I am but speechless. Kid Pedestal [This message has been edited by Kid Pedestal (edited 01-05-2000).] |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
LOL Seaangel, another servant added to my collection! Caroline, glad you liked it, I wasn't sure how people were going to respond to this one! Thank you everyone for your comments! |
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