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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Fulfillment Once when in a deep, deep slumber, I dreamt the earth in shades of umber. where laid asleep under a tree. A maid of wondrous beauty to me. She seemed to sleep enchantments care. Held in some trance of wizards dare. And I stood engrossed in spellbound mould, In fear that I would break sleeps hold. But my mind raced in careless leaps. To touch her hair, her nose, her cheeks. Perhaps to brush with finger tips And place a kiss upon her lips. I was in awe of what I saw. Much, much more than beauties door. And I breathed titillation sighs Her lids would open and see my eyes. And I hovered o'er her like a cover, Back of my mind, a would be lover. I gazed and wished and prayed my soul, That she would wake and fill my goal. But seems are seems, made up of scheme. And I have yet to fulfill this dream. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Sy, Beautiful poem , I hope you oneday fulfill your dream  Julie |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Seems are seems... I love that line. Good poem, Sy. Very well done. Michael |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore...the rhythm in this is so smooth...I liken it to Poe's "The Raven" Wonderful poem |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
You have a winner here! Loved it! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Not the ending I expected, but good nonetheless Seymour! --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This is such a beautiful verse, you've taken all the rhyme out of me. And a beautiful story. I agree with Hoot, it is very melodic, one of my favorites. Love ya, Liz |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
Great!! The last line is brilliant, i fully understand that predicament. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Seymour, simply beautiful! Denise |
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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
What a beautiful poem, interesting ending. Sometimes dreams become reality in time, I hope this dream comes true for you. Deborah |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Wish upon the nearest star, my dear, for with words as beautiful as these, there isn't one to resist! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
WOW!!!!!! I can't describe in words what this says to me....Thank You..........Bojopy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Whiskey, Your comment intoxicates me thank you. Michael, Thank you Michael. Hoot, Poe is my favorite poet, thank you. &L* Septsong, Thank you very much. Skyfyre, An end,is an end,is an end, thank you. Elizabeth, You are the angel of rhyme and move me every time. Love Sy Patch, Beautiful comment, thank you. Denise, Denise the sweet, thank you *L* Deborah, Thank you so much. Devina, Very sweet comment, thank you. Bojopy, Thank you much for the WOW!!!!. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, Sy, if this ever happens to you, give me a call and I'll bring bail money. You can't just go around touching sleeping maidens!!!...but it does make for a good poem and, in this case, an excellent one!  |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
You haven't fulfilled your dream and I see what you mean, just keep trying, and you may soon have a chance of defying. Nathan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, A friend, is a friend, is a friend. Thanks Nate, Thanks for the read and comment. |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
I enjoyed your poem. It screams romanticism with a touch of pain. Right up my alley |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jax, Enjoyed your comment, thank you. |
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