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Your voice still beckons me to peace
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Your voice still beckons me to peace |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Had I not loved you I would not love Your voice still beckons me to peace, A place we only knew in dreams, A place we only knew in dreams. To see beyond Those emerald eyes, To see what you saw, That fire that burned me to cinders, I call to you in dreams, I call to you in dreams. In the morning, I hear you laugh, As the sky fills with sunlight. In the evening, I feel you touch my cheek, As you breathe against my skin, And a teardrop falls, Or was that the rain? Those eyes, Those emerald eyes, In them I saw tomorrow. Those sleeping eyes; Rest now my love. Rest now my love. I am glad that it is I that miss you. For I would walk the fire, To spare you this. Rest now my love. How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I am still reeling from the reading. The most tender words I have found in so many days.  Claire |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, beautiful piece, LR. The last stanza really grabs the heart. Well done. Michael |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The first two lines make this very special....and the remaining ones are excellent. This is very good writing. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thank you masters! Meadowmuse -- I was still reeling when I wrote it -- but it was a long time ago. I find writing in the heat of the moment therapeutic -- but it is even more so to look back and see how far I've come. Thanks again |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This verse left me with a moment's peace. Thank you.  --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This was simply amazing. Very well written and it spoke to my heart. Rest now my love. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
The first lines just grabbed me and the rest flowed within it. Great work!!!..........Bojopy |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Yes but, think of the love you gave, that she gave and that you both shared... Peace sweetheart, peace HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
() () () Teardrops fall from my eyes whispered words felt as sighs love spoken dreamily thus we thank you for sharing with us. |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
Beautiful, the last stanza is incredible, it put me in a very pensive frame of mind. REally amazing, thanks. |
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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
So touching and somehow so sad, it really reached my heart. Deborah |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Heartwrenchingly beautiful. Very sad. Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Haunting |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Oh yes..... I love seeing the "other side" of our resident rebels..... Back for another round with ya!!! :  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is one that will long be remembered by many of us, I'm sure Liz |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is wonderful, Touched my heart in so many ways, simply excellent |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Such wonderful compliments. Thank you all. RG -- thanks for the husg! HuggsZ!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Heartbreaking and beautiful, LR!!! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very well done my friend....It brought back memories to me......(Okay, so the memories were kinda like; "Toerag, get your ass over here, I'm gonna give you a "piece" of my mind).....but that is kinda "Your voice beckons me to peace" isn't it? |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
ahemmmmm ahemmmmmm, am going to try to be serious following that hilarious reply....lol thanks toe.... really beautiful.....sigh..... "I am glad that it is I that miss you" this poem speaks volumes about the man that you are......really precious....and yes, thank you for sharing ......big hugs my friend |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
L.R, this is truly wonderful! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Softly spoken dear sir....romantically peaceful.... What else can I say following all these rave reviews!?!?!?! I didn't know you had it in you to write something so......*romantic* !!  LMAO  ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Stunningly done. The first two and the last two--perfectly capture the feeling. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
This is breathtakingly beautiful.So very tender and loving... I placed it in my favorites file... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
So tender and loving. ((((HUGS)))) B Gravitt |
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