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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Yonder the last twilight Shining in the sky, Clouds chase down the sun now, My throat is feeling dry. The clinking of a glass here, And there amongst the din, Of patrons happy voices, As I cooly settle in. The whiff of a robusto, Can be perceived from far, A few of the nubilities, Then scurry from the bar. The flame ignites the cuban seed, The afternoon's first draw, Is always welcome discourse, To the silence of the thaw. The barmaid knows my poison, She gets the glass of Jack, And places it before me, "Hey glad to see you're back" Stirring in the lemon, The ice spills o'er the top, The first sip's always hardest, Except for when to stop. Night burns down the ashes, The glasses now are four, More thirsty for communion, Now pouring through the door. Some faces now familiar, But I’ve yet to learn the names, They all greet each other, And embark upon their games. 'Just people' I think to myself, Like friends you've known before, But inasmuch as they're the same, They're different all the more. To my right there is a ghost, And to my left I hear it, So many voices from the past, And I drink down my spirits. Across the bar I give a glance, A fancy lass is there, She sips her drink and laughs a lot, Avoiding my brief stare. They're all so young It seems to me, But then there's no place else To be. Still… Thirsty How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Local, Let me be the first to say, a wonderful piece of poetry. The stories good and I understood, for few and far the subtleties. And I will look for more. |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
Local, I loved this piece. I was wondering what you you were doing when you thougt this up?..........bojopy |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Sipping on Jack Daniels and smoking a Partagas.. LOL Thanks  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A very entertaining tale, Local Rebal! I enjoyed this very much! Denise |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Local, Very good! I look forward to seeing more! Tamera |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Well there's probably more on Open#4 than you'll see subsequently, unfortunately. I post on another board as well. Thankyou dears... have read yours as well but don't always get time to post. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Great one L.R ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
mmmmmm, a world far from my own, but painted so vividly, it was like I was sitting on the same bar stool with you......lol...ok....so that is my own dream....but I coulda been right beside you.....great writing  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What? There's another board somewhere? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
*Clink* Enjoyed, Sir... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's been awhile... |
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