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Serpent In The Garden |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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SERPENT IN THE GARDEN Once a beautiful garden of flowers Streamed in brilliance strewn toward the sky. Whereby enchanted mystical powers Captivated the common eye. The flowers grew strong, roots interwoven, Marigolds, Daisies, Poppies too. Sunshine's splendor had seemingly chosen To mist the flowers with heaven's dew. Growing magically, an owner's delight, Soon the garden beckoned more care. So was given to a soul of pure white Duties of the garden to share. With visions of radiance all aglow The fair maiden, quick to abide, Nurtured with love every flower to grow, Tended to the garden with pride. But lured by Beauty, by fascination, Slithering slow, beneath the soil, The hiss and the kiss of usurpation Set forth to lay the garden spoil. Blinded by the light, confined to the Dark, Contaminating the essence of earth. Intending for all to relish his mark, Sprouting weeds were given their birth. Choking, polluting the flowers that be. Some uprooted from the dissension. While the Serpent whisked away his quarry To one's infernal dimension. Yet the garden tender was not alarmed, Seeking true beauty in all things. Thus by this, the very Serpent was charmed All flowers, to him, now offerings. Now, the Garden's owner has one true friend, One known from the garden's first day. Who has seen the Serpent slyly extend To precious, young flowers this way. Now he's standing at the gate, looking in, Pleading with the tender to see... At what price in finding beauty within, Are we holding back with the key? Michael Anderson [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 01-03-2000).] |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Michael, this is so haunting,wistful,sad and oh so beautiful. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
AWESOME!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Michael, One lovely poem, so your sniffing the flowers again, well I can't think of a better past time. Sy |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Another stunning piece Michael... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Remarkable talent you have young man, and to think you're all mine! **sigh  This piece truly shows your talent shining through and through! What a fabulous read, and I can see the moral/story shining through too! What a way you have with getting your point across - poetically! I applaude you for your storytelling....so sad but true. You are nothing short of brilliant mi-Lord! I love you....** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Let the Sunshine in, Michael.....  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
An enchanting and well crafted tale. Love your descriptive inclusion of natural elements. Very well written. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Captivating, Michael! Well done, as always! Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Why is it so that everything beautiful seems destined to destruction? Poignant and beautiful, Michael! Corinne |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
And what good is beauty locked behind a wall? Very deep poem Michael and a good read. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
You say you'd love to get into my head Mike, but methinks you've plenty to keep you occupied in yours my friend! Magnificent story! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Brilliant, Michael. Hopefully the tender will see and recognize...... |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Thank you all for the kind replies. Femme, definately ALL yours...LOL I know you understand completely. Nan, sure could use some of the sun's warmth right now. Meadowmuse, TY, that was indded challenging to try to do throughout the entire poem. Corrine, I sure wish I had an answer to that...it seems someone is always trying to tear down what others try so hard to build. Christopher, No doubt you're right there. Balladeer, I certainly hope so. Michael |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderous Michael and with a hidden meaning..me likes, so what's new? I always love your work At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato) ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW! A dance of a poem, Michael - this is just fantastic...well done. K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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samsonheart Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72Missouri rez. |
Excellent job Michael. Loved it. samsonheart |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Heart breaking verse this is and doubly so for the Keeper of the garden did not forgive the serpent bespelled by beauty. 'Tis masterful work. BTW, what is it about snakes that inspires such fear and revulsion? Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
A serpent in the garden, A snake in the grass, I can surely relate, I guess I've been an asp. Slithering through, The garden of rhyme, I've done something rude, To your love of all time? I've always tried, to be silly and such, Never meaning to hurt, But I've obviously touched, A sensitive place, With one you love so, And I feel so badly, That I should just go. Your gal is a fox, A talented one, So smart and so sweet, And a load of fun. Don't know what I said, Never meant to offend, But I guess I've done something, To your dear Poet Femme. I wish you the best, Hope the best for you both, With kindest regards, The idiot Toe! [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-04-2000).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
When I read a really good poem, I sigh, just like I just ate a really good meal, or had some really good...um, dessert. Just wanted to let ya know, that this gave me that same sense. Beautiful Mike! |
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