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Into Every Life... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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She looks into air, herself falling rain Dripping coldness past, memories old pain. Drops fall, the puddling her damp water-life. Spiraling a mirror, self-lonely strife. A sigh, one frown, crying soft saddened tears. Storms of remember - through bleak yesteryear. Clouds a-whorl, dark sky sheltering fair heart. But how can she joy, while taking no part? Cov’ring cold soul, corona of defense. Defying the stab of her fate’s intents. “This is madness,” she thinks in plaintive cry. “I’m here, on the cusp, of lay down and die. What my destiny, but an empty-off dream? A plaything with which gods and angels scheme. Am I doomed then to live, time never-free? Subsumed wholly ‘neath life’s scattered debris? Is justice, outside this torrential doubt? Perhaps more than sorrow, painful fall-out? Is love, perhaps, just a sliver of sun? Shining through mists, revealing Avalon? Personal paradise, which I can own, Evoking happiness, hither unknown?” She raises from streets of lonely no more. Light slicing through darkness, hopes washed ashore. Her withered gait now straightening with pride. She glides like an angel ‘cross future’s tide. Belief in life renewed, no, only found. Footsteps echoing, a cadence of sound. Caressing the ground, sing the beat of her heart. Into the sun seeking love’s brand new start. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Wonderful , This is a great piece I like it alot , well done  |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Such turns of fate and despair are indeed rare my friend. Did good yet again my friend. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This leaves me with the impression that I have read a short story that peeks into someone's life. It is amazing that the entire thing could have happened in the space of an instant. Well done my friend -- you are not so challenged by structured verse as you might imagine. --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
There's always room for a fresh start....lovely |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wo! Talk about not getting enough the first time around. Bartender, I'll have whatever you gave her! Definately a quality piece here, Chris. Me thinks I need a fresh peek into that brain of yours, something's definately churning in there. Great work. Michael |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Christopher, Only a woman in love would cry such tears and then "glide like a angel", and she must be someone beautiful to you, for you to have written in such a way about her. This is beautiful, as always Liz |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Somehow my dear, this piece speaks very personally to me. I know you didn't write it for me, but as I read it, I see myself as the character....Tis a remarkable piece! Passion pours from it - you have seen her through eyes of knowing, and you saw her correctly and beautifully! Aaahhhh..... ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The answer is often found within the act of questioning. Really enjoyed this poem. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You write with such passion, Chris, and I must congradulate you on being one of so few men, with the ability to look through a woman's eyes and successfully write about her pain among all else. Wonderful job- as usual my friend! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
I agree with Devina Chris..very well done! Tamera |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
YOu painted a wonderful picture of encouragement. Beautiful words and imagery. Wonderful piece |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Just wanted to add my wonderful to the others. This poem comes from a sensitive heart and I feel the churning of intelect and wisdom along with that empathy. Very well done! In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I have to ditto pFF's words with this one Chris. Though I know it is not I you write about, I feel every word you wrote. This could be my life. I am looking for that path to love; I do not believe it is easy nor close but I look all the same. Your talent shines through this piece my friend. It is very well written and touches the heart. |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
I thought this was phenomenal. It was nice to read an upturn of the character, in that many poems i read just continue on the downward slope. Incredible, not to mention, the writing itself, which is amazing. I hate writing these responses, because most of the ones i write about are so amazing, and well written, and great, that there is nothing i can really say to match their quality, as my own writing isn't quite on the same level. However, i will do my best and just say it was great. Thanks. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Chris: I love "Is love, perhaps, just a sliver of sun? Shining through mists, revealing Avalon?" *sigh* HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Whiskey- Thank you for reading and commenting! Scott- Rare indeed as I've yet to see one my friend. Kess- As you say...  And if it appears as a story, then perhaps I did something right eh? Ruth- ALWAYS! Thanks! Mike- (shrug) LOL, peek anytime you want bud, but it's scary in there! Liz- Your response has touched me, I'm glad I could do the same for you! Gen- I wrote it for you and for anyone who's ever been "there." Thank you!!! Meadowmuse- Bingo, exactly and yep, you got it right! Thanks! Devina- I don't know what to say! That's an incredible compliment, I'm flattered! Tamera- Thank you too! Jaxjoy- Encouragement comes in many forms, find it where you can! Martie-  I'm blushing... thank you for being so sweet!Marilyn- Thanks for the ditto's and I am glad I could touch your heart! Patchouliwhatever...LOL- I have to say that you response lack nothing in the matter of elegance and intent! I feel honored that you would put such effort into letting me know what you thought! Sharon- (I did, Idid, I did!) Hehe, I KNOW!!! Cindy- HUSG my friend, thank you for the sigh! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
OOPS! Almost missed this gem. Great writing, Christopher..."shining through the mists, revealing Avalon" That reference I love. Excellent work. |
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Felix Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 78USA |
You speak of my heart yet you do not know me. Amazed by you am I. Did you ever read about a frog who dreamed of being a king, and then became one? - Neil Diamond |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
What else could I say but beautiful? OK - many things, I concede! Yes, though, beautiful is a fitting word. K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, Beautiful Christopher!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
As always Christopher...nothing holds you back! Awesome piece my friend. Thanks for sharing it with me Jennifer Lee Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Christopher, you did an excellent job on this one!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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