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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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-housedown- Bombs overthrow their spouting smoke. The trees out front, made of burning boughs. Against the charred gate, knobs of grapes. Dashed seeded centers, the house a fallen shape. The daylit sky outgrows its swallowed smoke. The dusktime moon hues the glowing ruin. Watch the rubbled hand try escape. The window is starburst cracked, unneatly broken. Crushed by everything that mattered to it once when, The hand finds a penny on the sill. The coin shines like a glassmade ring through the pane. But copper does not absolve god's will. copyright 2000 Mike Chmielecki |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the Passions family! Impressive first poem sir! I look forward to reading more from you!  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Impressive first poem indeed! Welcome to Passions and I too shall be looking for you again.  |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
BEAUTIFUL,DEEP,HEAVY! ! This is the place for you, Welcome Home, Paul |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Great first post Welcome Julie |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
A strong first posting, indeed. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
What haunting images you've fashioned here. I love the hand finding the penny on the sill. Wonderful. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Oh yeah - More talent is good.... Welcome.....  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Mike! This is quite impressive writing! Denise |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks for the praise, all. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem so much. I was actually kinda nervous showing it. Just goes to show -- sometimes you've gotta take that jump. Thanks again!Mike |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Mike, yes sometimes you do just have to take that jump, and I must agree with everyone it is avery impressive first poem!! Welcome to passions! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wow, my first post. How far I've come. How short I've fallen. lol She said burn ... together. |
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