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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The Question How can the Night come clutching, clawing so? Clamoring and cloven, at barely the midst of our once endless day? Your keep is too close, mourning's Master, morose! Take leave, narrow Night! Do not linger. Leave us breathing, ever clinging by fragile finger, to those severed moments between jest and gesture when life stills, hushed, hovering, in sudden sequester, and droplet by precious droplet is ever rained into the drought of the weakened vein that begs only, with frightened refrain, to be fed another, yet again and again. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
It seeps deep into your soul and though terrifying, the Dark of night can be as comforting as the womb. Excellently done. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've conjured up some amazing images dear, good job! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
With each sunset, there's a glorious sunrise in the making....  |
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Coegwyr Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
Guess which fool missed this gem when it was first posted!! Thanks for the clue  Craig Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Love the way you used words here, excellent writing. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Superb writing, this is...fantastic free verse! Love it It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I envy your talents. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadowmuse, I agree with all the above, Enjoy your writings very much. Sy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ditto to all of the above! Excellent verse, indeed! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice images, this one just kind of reaches out and grabs you |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Free verse is so hard..but you did a magnificent job here!  |
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mama duck Junior Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 41Northern California |
Very well done!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, one and all, for your generous comments. I wrote this during recent reflection upon my sister's approaching death. The questions are, at times, overwhelming. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
WOW!!!!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Excellent, meadow - very very excellent. K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Echo Rhayne and Severn, thank you for reading my poem, and for taking time to respond.  Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Meadowmuse, Your writing takes us "between jest and jesture" in a very excellnt piece of writing. You are one of those I so admire in the writing of free verse Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Elizabeth ~ thank you. I enjoy free verse, though I'm still very much a neophyte to the craft. This forum is such a treasure...I've read so much fine work here with you all! Claire |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Wonderful Imagery , I like this |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Whiskey. Claire |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire - Realistic thoughts ... it grabbed me. ~Marge~ |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent writing meadowmuse. You do justice to free verse. |
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Femme's Father Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 58Carrollton, TX, USA |
Again I say, you have overwhelmed me with your beautiful speech of words that paint such magnificent pictures. You would make such a great artist, also. I always struggle for the words to express myself and you seem to flow so easily, so descriptively, so fluidly, so - oh I don't know how to say what I feel when I read your works. I am always drawn to your posts..Love the words you use to picture your thoughts into my soul. Truly magnificent..and I'm not just blowing smoke,Ok? God bless you even more... james david |
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