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Cruel
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia 
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" Cruel " Living a life of cruel bindings The servents have the power Dog men and their mean pastures Pulling blankets over our souls I'm sick of down faces Looking down at me from outside I want to see roses in my garden To dig up my thoughts from my brain This mutant blood hungry for lust Will strangle my mind Put to rest my connection |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
As I twitch my nose, much like Tabatha does...if these are real thoughts about you, then go look them straight back in the eye..cause no one should ever feel they are looked down upon...on the other hand if this is abstract, I'm back to twitching my nose.. HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Rainbow, Unfortunatley this is about me , one man inparticular and some horrible times in my life, some time ago , I now know love and know that is not what was right, Thank you  |
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littleJas Junior Member
since 1999-12-22
Posts 39Australia |
This is So sad you shouldnt feel like this ever if you need a friend email me |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
What a great poem Whiskey. Indeed your words are depict anger and cruelness. Nathan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Whiskey, Well cleaning out the attic helps. Now you can lay new soil with new seed and grow beautiful flowers. *L* Sy |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thanks Nate and Sy , you guys are so nice |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Man! This was really powerful, Whiskey Girl. It initially came across as anger, but when I read it again, what really came out was hope and optimism. What a wonderful talent you have to be able to pen a kaleidoscope of emotions so cleanly! You know where the garden lies, and you know where the seed awaits. And you also know the most important thing, the looking down is being done from the outside! As long as you keep the inside looking up, you'll reap a wonderful garden of roses. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thanks Long John your comments are apreciated |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Oh Whiskey! I don't know what to say, but sorry your feeling sad today, chin up my friend don't go asunder, your my only friend from the land down under, please don't worry but be happy of good cheer smile, laugh,dance and change that gear. Paul |
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littleJas Junior Member
since 1999-12-22
Posts 39Australia |
I hope you cheer up soon [This message has been edited by littleJas (edited 01-07-2000).] |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thanks Paul and Littlejas I will cheer up soon for I am here where I am most at ease reading all the wonderful poems posted by all the wonderful poets |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Whiskey, Very thought provoking, I must think on this some more, you have a wonderful way of writing. James |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Whiskey, cheer up my friend! You are a wonderful writer, and you are loving again, just by touching everyone of us here...Thank you for sharing! Tamera |
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