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agony
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since 1999-12-29
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0 posted 1999-12-30 09:42 PM




Why should love bring so much fear,to every souls heart?People
are afraid of people and that should nevr be.We are killing
each other off and no one seems to care.But should there be  a truce or a truth or dare?                   Tracy Schlieper

 

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whiskey
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since 1999-12-28
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Australia
1 posted 1999-12-30 10:42 PM


Very nice verse  
Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
2 posted 1999-12-30 10:43 PM


Very nice.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
3 posted 2000-01-01 07:12 AM


Very nice and I do care....I once heard someone say..."It is my philosophy that peace is something nobody wants but everybody strives for"  or was it the other way around *shrugs*  I dunno Happy New Year


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
4 posted 2000-01-18 02:18 PM


I also care....I do wish more people did though!!  Nice little poem!!

Take Care
Bridgette

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 2000-01-19 12:27 PM


Just a suggestion here, but perhaps by changing your format a bit, you'll make your piece a bit more reader friendly.

Why should love bring so much fear,
to every souls heart?
People are afraid of people
and that should never be.
We are killing each other off
and no one seems to care.
But, should there be a truce
or a truth or dare?


Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
6 posted 2000-01-20 01:38 AM


I must agree with Ruth, it does read a little easier that way!!  But it was still a great poem!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



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