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Fire Dance |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
From your spark I burst in flames Fusion, fission, fueling my fire. Rage inside me feels sharp as glass. Fear inside me I hope will pass. Your heat consumes me, leaves me barren as a forest you have touched, burnt by your enigmatic fury. Share your water with me. Quench the fire you have built within. Let me smolder through the night. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Has anyone ever told you you are a very talented poet? If not, I'm telling you now. This is fantastic!!! |
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Femme's Father Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 58Carrollton, TX, USA |
Each time I read this it keeps gettin' better and I finally found the rhythm and started seeing the picture your words were painting.. very well written. I like the way you put your feelings into subtle parables..keep up the good work...james david |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
Thank you so much. I am so happy to hear that you enjoy my writing. I like the supportive environment here at passions!!  |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is wonderful |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I am with hoot on this one, you are a talented poet...great poem! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ditto! Excellent poem! Denise |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Vivid wording, painting a sharply emotional picture - after several readings, I'm still coming up with new possible scenarios; the main one being pleasurably obvious. I really enjoy this one! Well done. |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
I appreciate your comments. Thank you all very much. |
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mama duck Junior Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 41Northern California |
Very nice--if it was on paper it might be too hot to touch. I enjoyed it a lot. Chris |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great poem here. Love the symbolism you use. This poem seems to urge me to ask for more somehow.... Michael |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Very deep words my friend, keep em comin! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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