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Porcelain Tears... |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Hurling into the shower sobbing until the water ran cold fury betrayal hopelessnees bouncing off the porcelain walls returning to coat me in my accusations shaking in rage kneeling on that hard porcelain wracked by angry images pelted by tepid water and cold realities lava tears burning hatred trails in violent weeping till sliding to the floor in exhausted acceptance watching the water play upon defeated fingers beading and rolling moisture drops cooling running in aimless rivers along the white walls of my skin steady porcelain rain a soothing beat upon my back calming me with wet caresses surrounding salty remembrance washing you away... |
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catwomen Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 49 |
your poem rang true for me. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WOW! This is excellent writing, Breathe! Beautiful! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Breathe~ A gripping portrayal, well stated. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Thank you catwoman...  )I see we are newbies together... Denise... Thanks! *beaming* Sad to say...there is more where that came from...*trying to think happy thoughts* Marge... Thank you...I feel like I am repeating myself... ) Interested in tutoring a horrid rhymer? *grin* I know it's hard...and I respect your ability... ) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
*Strugles to catch her breath again after the stark realities of this poem.* Oh, I've been there and your poem rings so vividly true. Wonderful writing! |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Thank you Hoot... )I was feeling pretty dark when I wrote it... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
whew, excellent, you captured the darkness and more....great writing! |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Thank you! )but I think your too kind... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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