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Patrick B Member
since 1999-10-28
Posts 58uk |
That you may warm this fettered heart and melt the shackled glacial ice thus defer oblivion not once,twice but thrice but would you catch my flowing thaw that laps up to your distant shore or would I drown in seas of tears bolstered by my rains of fears for is not ice my only friend when hearts are frayed it makes amend and protects me from decieving eyes that turn the sun to my darkened skies is my heart the only one that fails to beat when love has gone thus as an acorn falls to rock I'll keep myself within key and lock for rather a thousand years of frost than to love then live with love that's lost hello darkness my old friend |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Patrick- What a lovely piece. The phrases are unique and pulsate with imagery. While I don't like the cold, I do like this verse ... 'for rather a thousand years of frost than to love then live with love that's lost' Gosh, it's wonderful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Patrick, I really enjoyed this...it reminds me of a sonnet I wrote  To Have Never Loved ‘Tis better to have loved and lost they say Than never to have known true love at all But I, who’ve watched love quickly slip away Would rather not have taken that cruel fall O'er many loves, those tears of loss I've cried But those be mild and darling oh so few Compared to when, my love, you up and died And took my broken heart along with you So now, I live here lost inside my pain Your memories are only in my mind I’ll never feel true love like ours again My heart is gone, this shell is left behind And to the grave my voice will surely call ‘Tis better to have never loved at all |
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Patrick B Member
since 1999-10-28
Posts 58uk |
thanks marge,much appreciated.Hoot,isn't it odd how the same events can unlock the same door in everyone?I enjoyed your sonnet immensely and recognized every word hello darkness my old friend |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Losing at love can sure hurt. Great poem, Patrick! (yours too, Ruth!) Denise |
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