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Open Poetry #5

The Last Hello

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

0 posted 2000-02-05 07:44 PM

THE LAST HELLO

I remember clearly our first meeting
I offered my hand on introduction
But you were busy, our eyes only briefly met

I do not know when it was, you first noticed me
Perhaps I crawled slowly and deliberately
Under your skin, until you felt me there,
Desiring you, wanting you inside me

Now we are lovers, we share stolen moments,
Still passionate, still exciting, still desiring
of each other's presence

How do we end this - with a handshake and a last hello?

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2000-02-05 08:05 PM

Roniece, Yes, there are last hellos, but don't stop now, it seems wonderful. You have a very clever title here and I liked the poem, too
Liz

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2000-02-05 08:28 PM

Roniece, Wow! This is so moving! I feel like there is more to tell here.........(great poem!

)-SEA

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 2000-02-05 10:13 PM

It hard to say goodbye

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2000-02-10 08:45 AM

Lovely..lovely...lovely...James

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

5 posted 2000-02-11 08:44 PM

Thank you for your comments, I am very much enjoying reading thru all of your work - Passions is definitely the place to be!
'Smiles and laughter make the world go round'

Elizabeth: Thanks for taking the time to read my poem

SEA: Yes there is a little more to tell

Hoot Owl: Thank you for your comments

James: Thank you - x

Wizzard
Member

since 2000-02-09

Posts 209

6 posted 2000-02-12 02:40 AM

It sounds to me like something really special that shouldn`t be ended.
Very nice Roniece

Today is the first day of the rest of my life.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-06-06 02:01 PM

wow

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