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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Hopelessely bound unfettered by the chains of love's grip -greatest gift, fate's cruelest curse. Wherefore do I weep at knowing the joy, the warmth, at feeling the peace, the fire. Wherefore do I weep unable to complete , to be, unknown the kiss, the flames. Wherefore do I weep at loving not living seeing not touching breathing not sharing holding not loving? All, because I, The Fool, am no more? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
HOW do you do it? This is magnificent! Submit, submit, submit! Do you hear me!?  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
WOW WOW WOW!!! I agree with Sharon! Submit, but I won't repeat like she did! hehe...  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Chris you know how I like to talk, well this left me speachless. You, my firend, have talent that is boundless. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I agree that it's an excellent poem but I'm not going to command you to submit, like these ladies are doing  |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Have I told you lately that I love your free verse? Yes, I do believe I have ... I am ashamed to admit, however, that the last stanza threw me off. I was following you (I think) until then -- but where did the "Fool" thing come from...?  --Me< !signature--> Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 02-05-2000).] |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
Wow.... I never know what to say in these replies, there are just so many talented writers her, I just love reading everything.... and you Christopher are an amazing writer!!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is poetry at its best, and who else could have written it - no one. Congratulations on this fine work Liz |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Amazing work, Christopher. I'm getting a strong Tarot influence in it. Your reference to The Fool (a card in the Major Arcana), the symbolism of being bound (8 of Swords), "greatest gift, fate's cruelest curse" brings to mind The Devil card (in the Rider Waite deck, depicting two nude lovers literally chained to each other, standing before The Devil himself) and "at loving not living/seeing not touching/breathing not sharing/holding not loving" seems to reflect the 7 of Cups, showing visions of great things beyond our reach. Am I just coloring it with my latest interest? Or was this intentional? It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher- I like this very much. You do marvelous 'things' with your words. It reminded me of a piece of your artwork that you entitled 'A Single Tear'. That is a favorite of mine. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
OOOOOHHHH!!! So talented, so deep, smart, funny and good-looking too! What's a poor poetess to do? It borders on cruelty... I, too, picked up on Tarot allusions--'fess up, Christopher! MORE, MORE, MORE!!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed the sound of this piece, the repeating "wherefores," the continuous questioning element, the fluid phrasing, the title. As for the "fool"... The fool spends the morning asking questions. The wise one spends the morning finding answers. I'm glad I saw this tonight. Claire |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I loved your style with this one Chris...and may all your dreams come true!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW!!!! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sharon- I did I did I did, thank you, I know! Becca- Ditto the above! Marilyn- Boundless, no. I would say rather that I am just a man with soem words Balladeer- Thank you sir, I was beginning to feel like I was back in the Navy!!! Kess- Yes you have, but you can keep on telling me!!! Red- I've read some of your work too, and I say you aren't behind at all! Liz- A higher compliment would be hard to find! Thank you kind lady! Tara- Thank you for your interpretation. (blush) but in reality, this spilled forth in a matter of less than five minutes. It wasn't something I brought, but rather that came from that place which all writers aspire! Marge- Geesh! Will you stop it! My facial muscles are beginning to get sore from all the smiles you've given me!!! Serenity- Be serene, that's what you can do! Actually, you've managed to come close to making me embarassed! Thank you for the praise though I'm not so sure about your accusatins! Claire- A wise statement. Perhaps this fool should become a wise man! Devina- If all my dreams were to come true, then what would I have to dream about? Ruth- THANKS!!! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Ohh... I like, I like, I like. Also, Tara's interpretation of it was very interesting. |
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