Open Poetry #5 |
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Destiny Mine (challenge) |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA ![]() |
Destiny Mine I don’t rely on tarot cards Or a crystal ball It’s not that I’m a cynic, No, that’s not it at all. It’s just that I believe In the power of my dreams. I have the will to succeed, Not many do it seems. Sitting idly does nothing for me, I can’t lie back and wait. Hoping karma will come through, Relying on only fate. I take soul responsibility Over the life which I preside The world’s mine for the taking. My destiny is mine to decide. *************************** I need a title for this, any suggestions are welcome. Great challenge!< !signature--> It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley [This message has been edited by Tara Simms (edited 02-05-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great job, Tara! Challenge well met! Title...hmmmmm...how about 'Destiny Mine'...or maybe 'My Dreams, My Destiny'....that's all I can think of right now! Great poem, again, as always! Denise |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Tara, This is a beautiful poem describing your self-reliance. So why not call it that? "Self-reliance" or maybe, "My Reliant Self" ~Gene ![]() [This message has been edited by u_gene (edited 02-04-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
well met challenge ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tara- I think you did a wonderful job in meeting the challenge. Wonderful thoughts. How about 'Sole Responsibility'? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Marge, That's a good one, but what about changing one word in the poem and making that "Soul Responsibility"? That has a deep underlying meaning to me. ~Gene |
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Shelley Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 263Ohio, USA |
Well done Tara! After reading this, not only did i feel your sense of self reliance but it also made me take notice of my own. ![]() ~Shell |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Woohoo...challenge well met Tara... ![]() The suggested titles are great..I might add to the list..How's bout.."keeper of destiny". "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Changing "sole responsibility" to "soul responsibility" and then using that as the title as well puts an ever deeper spin on the creation...which was well done. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Tara, I like it, I like it, I like it!!! You are as always an inspiration to so many (including me!) Nick and Phillip are so lucky to have you as their Mommy, their girlfriends will all have a tough act to follow! How about: Tara: Destiny Mine I am a Life Purpose Coach who specializes in assisting men and women to clarify their Life Purpose and then in turn live true to their purpose. After 5 years working with the Severely Mentally Ill in County Mental Health, I gave up the bureaucracy (and safe, secure blanket) of this environment to pursue my own purpose and passion. |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Beautifully done Tara, and words of wisdom to live by. I like "dsnyder"'s suggestion - Destiny Mine. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
I'm pleased with all the responses! Thank you, thank you, thank you! Shelley, I'm doubly pleased that you have found your sense of self reliance! That is something to celebrate! Denise, Gene, Sunshine and Jeff: As you can see, I used all of your suggestions. Thank you for helping me name this poem. I've always found that to be the hardest part. Ruth, Marge and Luna: Thanks, ladies. I love how the other poets/poems in here inspire me. Especially thankful since I hadn't felt inspired in a while. Julie and Michael, I'm *blushing*! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Tara!! This was indeed a great poem. . . it captures the spirit of your signature and shows us your self-reliance and self-confidence!! Excellent!! Any other takers?? --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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