Open Poetry #5 |
Missing Key |
tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
There is a woman in a room her door wont open any more The lock is old, the key is lost, She stay's all to herself She can not answer if you knock, For the key is missing to the lock In days gone by it opened, with laughter it would swing Music filled the room with sweetness, With a sent that flowers bring Now it stifled with the stench of rot That eats in to your lungs Once her face was full of life Now her head is hung She sang and danced as silver moonlight framed her long red hair Now that hair has turned to white, Yet no one know's she's there Up on her door there hangs a sign for all the world to see |> "if you give your heart, don't lock your door "Never" give your key. For behind this door lives a broken heart locked in for eternity<| If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very sad, Tori, and well done, of course! Denise |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
While I agree that this is sad...it is a beautiful piece Tori She sang and danced as silver moonlight framed her long red hair Now that hair has turned to white, Yet no one know's she's there Up on her door there hangs a sign for all the world to see I loved this passage so much Jenny |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Tori this was some excellent writing! Though so very sad. Wow, I could almost smell that rot, cept I chose not too...hehe Excellent my friend, excellent! |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks Denise for the kind words.. You too Jenny!!! Rebecca I was going to use another word for that smell. but after all the good one's in the conversation the other night I need to go to confession..lol |
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