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She Smiles |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
In great disgrace with bitter grief The widow stands with such relief The burden done the bell has tolled She fights, to keep control Her head hung low with humility For no one on this earth to see Yet the shame she knows, she can not hide The scars she wares of his pride On drunken nights when he came home And woke the house with fists of stone He left his anger in her bones With broken lips he took her pride To stand with nothing left inside A mindless zombie she'd become With his rage and the smell of rum The humiliation she endured Painful scars of his words They kept her trapped with in his tomb Of violent love and bloody moons Locked inside his bitter hate, there was no way to escape Is all she knew, no more no less a victim of love, possessed On the morning he did not awake, she went to see why he was late And found him laying on his side she knew at once he had died Tears fell out like pouring rain, she knew she'd never hurt again And silently she stood as the earth fell down, as they lowered his body into the ground She lifted her head for all to see She smiles, for at last she's free tori 2000 If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very powerful piece, Tori. I can understand her relief. Very sad that so many people have to live this kind of existence. Well done! Denise |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Tori, this is excellent. I loved the last two lines. - SEA |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
I agree Denise.. I help out at a shelter close by .. it is so sad to know so many live like this.. Thanks Sea  )If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Whoa.....powerful, indeed. I don't understand why...WHY does this happen? It takes a strong person to stay....a stronger one to leave. Profound words here, Tori. |
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~ViXeN~ Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 93Guelph, Ont. Canada |
wow, this is really powerful... i had a friend once who lived in a life such as that... its a terrible experience that nobody should have to face. well done |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks for reading Sally and Vixen I sure hope your friend has made her way out of the abuse... If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem, tori... Unfortunately, too many wait for death to provide their release from the hell they're living in... and they end up being the one put in the grave. [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 02-02-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hi Tori the line touched me "the widow stands with great relief" and I can understand your feeling of relief to finally be free of such a great burden. It is such a sorrowful thing that people find themselves stuck in this cycle of pain and abuse. I too smile with you that you are now free yet it is sad that you have so many ugly memories to remember. I hope many new blessings and joy will replace your sadness. This poem was very beautifully written...such a nice smooth flow. Take care, James |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
I agree with you southern Thanks James this one is not about my life but I think it is all of our fight to help stop it ! If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Tori, this was really strong! A message of abuse, and you've described it well! How one feels when they're in it. Very sad, if only all would realize that they are worth more than that, and there is always a way out. Excellent, but so very truthfully sad! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh my, this one really spoke strongly to me. I at one time wished for this to happen, me who would not hurt a fly...it's a hard situation to be in. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
I've seen a lot of this working at the local womens shelter Dove.. it takes a strong person to endure and even stronger one to exit but so many wait till one of them is gone.. Ruth, you were not alone "She Smiles" is what so many of them have waited and wished for.... until they find their way.. If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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