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My Wilderness
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My Wilderness |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA 
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"My Wilderness" Parched by the winds of time My tounge and throat long to taste A refreshing drop of truth's moisture that soothes my secondary life I was hatched from situations unknown Yet seen to be a treasure non the less Cast astray to the dunes of eternity By which my character has grown Into manhood so uncertain That I wander in this wilderness Searching for something to soothe my thirst And wash away my doubt hovering as a curtain Suspending the light of day from bringing me hope Casting a form of Darkness over my being which scorches my flesh at bay Then upon the embers I cast my gaze where truth is nailed and all can see My freedom bound and bleeding there Giving me a river of life for all my days Jfreak |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
That's some wilderness~ Beautiful poem, J~ Marie~ |
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dovesongs Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 102Michigan |
You have the gift of words. Very nice! |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Thank you for your kind words of encouragment. Jfreak |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
good effort. enjoyed. |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Again and Again, Thank you. Jfreak |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Life can be like that wilderness, for sure! Thank God for that River of Life! This is wonderful,Jfreak! Denise |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"Then upon the embers I cast my gaze where truth is nailed and all can see My freedom bound and bleeding there" Those lines are amazing! Not to say the rest of the poem isn't, but ... you know what I mean.  --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Thank you "D" & Sky. I really appreciate what you have said. Your comments are encouraging. I really look forward to hearing all of your comments, good or bad. They are what make my poetry better. Jfreak |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wow, you know I can't help but think of the 40 yrs the wandered in the wilderness. Great writing jfreak! |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Well, now....I haven't seen you in a while. (or you haven't seen me?!) A poem one must ponder...and read more than once. Great writing, jfreak. |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Again, All I can say is Thank you and a hundred times over thank you. This has actually become my new favorite poem. (of my own works) You are all great encouragers. And Sally, it has been a long time. I spent the months of Aug-Dec preparing for a mission trip to Hong Kong over the Christmas holidays. So all my free time was taken up with working a second job. I was working two full time jobs just to get the money to go. I was only getting like 3 1/2 hours a sleep anight. So i didn't have time to write or get on this site. It is nice though to come back and everyone still remembers me. I guess I am almost a Legend. (waking up from dream land now) Jfreak |
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