Too Painful Is The Waking (RG's Challenge)

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Denise

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0 posted 2000-01-30 03:17 PM

I’m standing in the shadow
Created by love’s light
The darkness hides my sorrow
Deep hidden from your sight.

The music’s playing magic
It flows from love's true heart
But lonely grows more tragic
For silence is my part.

We’re dancing in my dreaming
There I’m the one you love
It’s me you are romancing
Beneath dream’s stars above.

Too painful is the waking
A burden I can’t bear
So dreaming’s where I’m staying
Enfolded in your care.

It’s there I see a smile
That’s beaming bright for me
And sings there all the while
Our love was meant to be...

And it’s seeing that smile
That makes my life worthwhile.

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RobertB
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1 posted 2000-01-30 03:49 PM

awwww Denise.

Robert

Gene
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2 posted 2000-01-30 03:56 PM

"I’m standing in the shadow
Created by love’s light"

Wonderful phrasing. Great way to start. Very beautiful poem.

~Gene

Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 2000-01-30 04:00 PM

Denise, You and Sy are on the same wavelength, both dreamers. (well, I am too)
This is such a romantic dream. Don't let me disturb you
Beautiful
Liz

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2000-01-30 04:08 PM

Denise,
When it comes to dreaming your no slouch, love the poem. *L* Sy

Marge Tindal

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5 posted 2000-01-30 04:32 PM

Denise-
This is so lovely.
You've been inspired by the challenge
and certainly rose to meet it.
Wonderful.
~*Marge*~

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Mike
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6 posted 2000-01-30 04:34 PM

Flowing beauty as always...

RainbowGirl
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7 posted 2000-01-30 04:45 PM

Denise: Wow!...This is hauntingly beautiful..

HUGS

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devina
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8 posted 2000-01-30 05:26 PM

I think you've hit this one right on the mark!!! Beautiful lines Denise!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Denise

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9 posted 2000-01-30 05:27 PM

Robert, Gene, Elizabeth, Seymour, Marge, Mike and Rainbow Girl, thank you all so much for reading and commenting! I'm glad you liked it!

Thanks to you too, Devina! You snuck in there on me!

Denise

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10 posted 2000-01-30 05:32 PM

Beautiful Denise! You met the challenge with some lyrical phrases!

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2000-01-30 05:36 PM

What a beautiful romantic dream Denise!!
Well Done!

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Denise

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12 posted 2000-01-30 05:37 PM

Thanks, PdV! I'm glad you liked it! And you too, Dark Angel! (you snuck in there on me....hehe)

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Martie

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13 posted 2000-01-30 06:04 PM

This is lovely Denise and heart breaking. What say we turn things around and make the dream reality and reality but a dream?

Gemini
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14 posted 2000-01-30 06:12 PM

A most beautiful poem.

Denise

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15 posted 2000-01-30 06:54 PM

Thanks Martie and Gemini! Glad you liked it!
Wouldn't that be great Martie, if people could make all their dreams their reality?! I'm sure people would stand in line for that one!!

Denise

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16 posted 2000-01-31 04:46 PM

Denise, I like it-even when the world does not live up to one's expectations--Anything's possible in our dreams--ah what dreams--another fine poem!!! David
A ROSE for you my dear- you 'rose to the challenge!--thanks for bring it to my attention.

fc
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17 posted 2000-01-31 04:51 PM

yep know all about living in dreaming, you put it beautifully

Danny Holloway
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18 posted 2000-01-31 04:54 PM

Would like to echo u_gene's comments above.
Danny

Denise

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19 posted 2000-01-31 06:52 PM

Thank you David, FC and Danny for reading and commenting! Glad you liked it! Thanks too for the rose, David!

Denise

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20 posted 2000-01-31 07:21 PM

Oh Denise, this is so sad and sweet! Your poetry always touches my heart!

Corinne

Denise

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21 posted 2000-01-31 09:57 PM

Thanks Corinne! I'm always grateful for your input!

Denise

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22 posted 2000-01-31 10:03 PM

"We’re dancing in my dreaming"
Absolutely wonderful line as well as the rest of the poem

Denise

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23 posted 2000-01-31 10:37 PM

Thanks, Ruth! I'm glad you liked it!

Denise

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24 posted 2000-02-01 01:42 AM

You have "wow'd" me~

This is wonderfully, beautifully, thoughtfully written~

Marie~

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25 posted 2000-02-01 03:34 AM

Cherished dream. Tell me more so I know what I am doing wrong here.

Fabulous Denise

I used to be schizophrenic, but we're ok now so don't make me mad cause I'm running out of places to hide the bodies......LOL

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26 posted 2000-02-01 11:11 AM

Thank you, Marie and David for your kind words! I'm glad you liked it!

Denise

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27 posted 2000-02-01 03:11 PM

A very exquiste poem Denise. You're a great dreamer.

Nathan

Denise

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28 posted 2000-02-01 04:55 PM

Thank you Nate! You always say the sweetest things!

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29 posted 2000-02-01 06:02 PM

Oh Denise! This is truly beautiful!!! What a picture you painted!

Denise

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30 posted 2000-02-01 10:23 PM

Thanks, Rebecca!! I'm glad you liked it.

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Eloise
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31 posted 2000-02-01 10:39 PM

Denise, this is beautiful - as always. Then again, I am a dreamer too.

I've been out of commission for awhile so it looks like I have some reading catching up to do!

Denise

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32 posted 2000-02-01 11:21 PM

Welcome back, Eloise! I missed you! Thanks for reading and for your kind comments!

Denise

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33 posted 2000-02-01 11:26 PM

Denise, perfectly romantic!

-SEA

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34 posted 2000-02-01 11:28 PM

Awe I really liked this one Very Romantic..

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Denise

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35 posted 2000-02-01 11:41 PM

Thank you, Sea and Tori! I'm glad you found it romantic!

Denise

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36 posted 2000-02-01 11:42 PM

I had to reply to this poem. How beautifully you write. I enjoyed reading this one.

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37 posted 2000-02-01 11:46 PM

Yes, it is romantic, Denise.

..."I like dreamin'....'cause dreamin' can make you mine...." Love how your poems evoke memories!! Wonderful, as always.

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38 posted 2000-02-02 12:15 PM

Thank you, January and Sally for your kind comments! I'm glad you liked it! And welcome to Passions, January!

Denise

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39 posted 2000-02-02 03:06 PM

This is lovely Denise

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40 posted 2000-02-02 05:20 PM

Thanks so much, J., for reading and commenting! I'm glad you liked it!

Denise

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