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jaxjoy
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

0 posted 1999-12-29 03:43 PM

How she breaks
as she waits...
for the world
to gather round
and catch the demise
of the poor foolish girl.

She was a thief
to your comfort
or
an answer
to your prayers
but
always
kept in darkness.

Her faith
began to falter.
Thus exposing you.
You need not disrobe
to be naked.
Only honest.

The dawn star
burns bright
and clears
the evening mist.
Her vision restores.
What she first
deemed glory
is only weakness.
A sadistic weakling,
Afraid.

Her head hangs low
as she finds
her angel
never had wings.
It was she
all along
who had
the gift of flight.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

1 posted 1999-12-29 04:00 PM

Wonderful free verse! I love it!

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member

since 1999-09-17

Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

2 posted 1999-12-30 03:26 AM

I enjoyed this greatly!

~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-12-30 04:40 AM

Applauding!!! Wonderful!!! Oh, can I ever relate to this one. You expressed yourself very clearly and this flows so well. Great job, I wouldn't change a thing in it

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-30-1999).]

TomS
Junior Member

since 1999-12-18

Posts 32

4 posted 1999-12-30 10:03 AM

Very powerful and intriguing. Such a mystery.

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

5 posted 1999-12-30 10:07 AM

Very well done! I like this alot, wonderful words

Betty Gravitt
Member

since 1999-09-11

Posts 222
Georgia United States

6 posted 1999-12-30 10:23 AM

Beautiful. I like this very much.

B Gravitt

jaxjoy
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

7 posted 1999-12-30 03:15 PM

I am glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you all for sharing.

caroline
Senior Member

since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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8 posted 1999-12-30 04:06 PM

Jax this is absolute perfection! I really love this...keep that posting going, girl

I'm enjoying your writing!

It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain

Tamera
Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 121

9 posted 1999-12-30 05:57 PM

I enjoyed this so much! So true!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

10 posted 1999-12-30 08:25 PM

JaxJoy -
Oh, how I like this ...
what a thought ...
what truth:

'You need not disrobe
to be naked.
Only honest.'

WONDERFUL ! WONDERFUL !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

11 posted 1999-12-30 08:31 PM

What a wonderful and powerful poem. I liked those same lines that Marge did. Hope to read more of your poems.

In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

jaxjoy
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

12 posted 1999-12-30 10:22 PM

Thanks again

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