»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #5
»
Smoke
| Open Poetry #5 |
|
Smoke |
|
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
|
Smoke We watched the unreal scene, shaken, shocked and cold. Swift officials moved in harmonious action. I felt beholden to the firemen, police, ambulance crews, and marveled at their commonality, a mixture of efficiency, strength and compassion. Only an outer shell vestige, smoke long diminished a stench I’ll never forget. The call came after midnight, by then she was gone. Detectives ruminating, perhaps she had fallen asleep while smoking, or left a candle burning? The coroner found booze in her blood, a lifelong pattern of furtive drinking, in the end, redemption. She never heard the fire’s roar. Someone once told me that the heat sears the lungs immediately, and death is rapid. I allow myself this belief. |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved | |||
bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wow, and ouch. Mike |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Absolutely speachless here |
||
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne- This touches my heart. Sadly, it touches my heart. This feels very real. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
||
|
RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Corinne: HUGS sweetheart Feed your dreams with love... |
||
|
Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Wow Corinne....! |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, Well done, good construction and a good poem. |
||
|
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Let's bring this wonderful work back for another round...  |
||
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Mike, Hoot Owl, Marge, Rainbow, Toe, Seymore and Nan. Corinne |
||
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Corinne, this is so painful. I hurt reading this. You tell such a vivid story with your written word. -SEA |
||
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Dear SEA, thank you. I was very hesitant to post this, too much of a downer, I thought. This woman wasn't a nice woman at all. But no one deserves to go like that... Corinne |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
