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In the Moonlight, Shadows Dancing (I love a challenge!)
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In the Moonlight, Shadows Dancing (I love a challenge!) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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In the moonlight, shadows dancing on the lake, If this is a dream, don't pinch me Because this is one from which I don't want to wake. Nothing but the moon and starlight as far as the eye can see My hand you reach for, your hand I take Like we're standing at the edge of the earth, but there's nowhere else I'd rather be. In the moonlight, shadows dancing under the moon, You and I step into that cool clear pool Hoping that the morning comes none too soon. The water against our warm skin makes it feel soft and cool. Far in the distance, the plantive cry of the last loon Echoes to the sky above and the forest surrounding filling both with his mournful "Ool". In the moonlight, shadows dancing on the shore, Being with you here is more than I could have dreamed And in my heart, I could not have asked for more. You have entered my life making it more real than it seemed. The love that I have for you burns from within my core. Then to sky and moon, to star and loon at the top of my voice, "I love you!" I screamed. ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sven, very romantic, I like it a lot!!  -SEA |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sven, this is precious. And the line, "Far in the distance, the plantive cry of the last loon" illustrates so well the poetry within you. I love that you scream "to sky and moon, to star and loon at the top of my voice, "I love you!" ...such a lovely work, this is. Claire |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Again...another fine poem to the challange and oh so romantic I can live with the idea That we are merely actors Playing a part But I do wish Whoever is writing my script Would learn to use A few more Happy Endings ~Javan |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You are a true romantic, for sure, and in answer to your question posed under one of my poems, the answer is yes. You are a mixture of both Liz |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
A true Romantic indeed Sven (HUGS) Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sven- This is just too pretty and well-done to fade away. So back to the top with you ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautifully done!!!!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful flowing poetry Sven. You really put some feelings into this one. James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all so much. . . I may write another one (that would be 3!) based on these words I love them so much! Born romantic that I am! Thank you. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh very romantic and very beautiful!!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Sven! So romantic!! Denise |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah - It's Mr Romance.... Where you been, Sven??? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I've been here Nan. . . where have you been? Thank you Dark Angel and Denise. . . I am indeed a romantic and it's so nice to have a place to share my feelings. . . especially now. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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