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Balladeer
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0 posted 1999-12-26 06:45 PM



There is a door in front of me
That wasn't there before
Which promises true ecstacy
If I walk through that door.

It beckons me with love devine
If I will but pass through
To taste the pleasures that are mine.
That door, my dear, is you.

I stand here just a step away
From everything you pledge
And yet it seems to me I may
Be standing on  a ledge

The great unknown lies just beyond
Just barely out of view
Thin ice that masks a frigid pond?
The doorway that is you.

It may just be that I am scared
I've walked through doors  before
To find that I was ill-prepared
For all that lay in store

And, yet, your words invite me so
I'm not sure what to do
Should I step through or should I go
From that door which is you.

If hesitation worries you
Please try to understand
Experiences I've been through
Cause me to stay my hand

Are you a door to heaven's gate
Or to the gates of Hell?
Will we find love or learn to hate
Each other? Who can tell?

So here I stand, with feet of lead
Without a single clue
Hold back or rush right through, instead
The doorway that is you.


© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 1999-12-26 06:56 PM


One never knows until they venture through! Quite scarey though, for sure. And for sure, another GREAT POEM!!!

 Denise



Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 1999-12-26 07:01 PM


Go halfway through and taste the wine, if it seems like a good year, then sip it ever so slowly.
Liz

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3 posted 1999-12-26 07:06 PM


I like this one, Balladeer! I say 'Go through the door'....take a chance...if it will make you happy!  

Nan
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4 posted 1999-12-26 07:11 PM


Well, now..... If stepping through that door is nice and comfy and cozy, why wouldn't you?... Seems like a no-brainer to me...
Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-12-26 07:38 PM


Denise...good response. Thank you.

Elizabeth...against the rules. Sometimes you're not allowed to go in halfway and sip the wine. Ever try to go halfway into an elevator? Like it or not, you're going up or down!

Sharon...that's the rub. You don't know if it will make you happy or not.

Nan...Same thing . Sure, you're right IF you knew it was nice and comfy and cozy. You've seen that guarantee on doors you've passed through?

Betty Gravitt
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6 posted 1999-12-26 08:07 PM


Balladeer the word "if" is just two letters, but sometimes it can stop a lot of sunshine in our lives.  

Love the poem, and (((HUGS)) to send you courage.


 B Gravitt



RainbowGirl
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7 posted 1999-12-26 08:19 PM


More to the point: What will you lose if you don't, or should I say - Can you make work, whatever is left?

HUSG
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 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.





[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 12-26-1999).]

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 1999-12-26 08:30 PM


Balladeer, at least you have a choice...weigh the odds and see which is the better of the two. Sometimes we have no choice but to brave the unknown though.
RobertB
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9 posted 1999-12-26 08:42 PM


Balladeer, you might want to just ring the doorbell and wait to see who answers.

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Robert

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10 posted 1999-12-26 10:15 PM


LOL@RobertB. I can understand your hesitation. Well written.
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 1999-12-26 10:26 PM


Balladeer,
How does that saying go?
A coward suffers a thousand deaths
A brave man suffers but one.
Your poem is excellent,
But they always are. Sy

devina
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12 posted 1999-12-26 10:48 PM


I have to say go for it, she's obviously worth alot, to have you writing poetry dear man!!
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13 posted 1999-12-26 10:50 PM


Best of luck, Balladeer, with whatever you decide. Fine work, by the way.

Elizabeth

 Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes



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14 posted 1999-12-26 11:01 PM


Betty....you are so right!

Rainbow..you don't know what you lose because you never got it to lose it!

Hoot...weighing the odds is language I can understand. Thank you.

Robert...Now there's something I never thought of!

rosesthorns...I thank you.

Sy...one or a thousand - you still die!

devina....women can be inspirational, for sure.

Elizabeth...thanks for the thoughts...but it's only fictional.

Sally S.
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15 posted 1999-12-26 11:52 PM


Chances never taken lead to misery in the end. If it feels so right, you know.  Sometimes you have to prepare yourself for what lies beyond that door, but if what is beyond that door, stirs your entire being...you better believe I'd take the risk.  Wonderful poem, my dear. (and even if it is fictional..it is all to true in life   ) Muy Bien!!  
Tara Simms
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16 posted 1999-12-26 11:52 PM


Ok, Balladeer, I'm taking the credit for having inspired this piece.  You commented on Portal, so I know you read it and got the inspiration for this, right?  Right?  LOL, just say yes.  I've always wanted to inspire great poetry!  

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



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17 posted 1999-12-27 12:02 PM


Well done Balladeer.  Be the captain of your destiny, do not hesitate, run for each new experience  

 Reach inside your heart, that is the greatest gift you can bestow. Merry Christmas..
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



Pepper
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18 posted 1999-12-27 12:04 PM


Promised ecstacy and love devine....I'd have to walk through....
Another wonderful piece Sir  

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



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19 posted 1999-12-27 12:59 PM


Well Balladeer...this is a tough one for sure.  Mixed emotions and all. No easy decison.  You're either happy with what you have in life or not. If not, then take a step through that door!  

Lots of emotions here, but again, so well written!

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Keep Christ in CHRISTmas


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20 posted 1999-12-27 04:29 AM


Fictional eh?
Wow - imagine what would come out if it weren't - if you managed to be so convincing in this, I shudder to think of one of truth...! Lovely lovely work - crafted through yet another of your voices.

~Deep bows of appreciation~

The Severny one.  



[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-28-1999).]

Iloveit
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21 posted 1999-12-27 09:52 AM


will agree with severn on this one...if this isn't real emotion I can't imagine how one of truth could touch any more....but I do understand, I write many a poem in the abstract world of "if"....maybe someday I will get it together in the real one.....sigh.....beautiful poem...  
Echo Rhayne
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22 posted 1999-12-27 09:57 AM


This is great, suspenseful, emotional, just wonderful!  


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


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23 posted 1999-12-27 01:41 PM


MM....Fictional, huh?  Someone somewhere will eternally blessed if they ever land the romantic old you!  

[This message has been edited by Deb Lynne (edited 12-31-1999).]

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24 posted 1999-12-27 05:39 PM


Shame on you Balladeer for upsetting all these women with your fictional door.  I'm for walking through doors myself, even fictional ones.  Great poem!
Richard
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25 posted 1999-12-28 10:43 AM


Absolutely beautiful, Robert. Such meaning.
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26 posted 1999-12-29 11:56 PM


Isn't this like the start of any relationship, I can feel your tentativeness.
             new guy
                 Paul

Andrew Scott
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27 posted 1999-12-30 01:11 AM


Sir Balladeer:  He who hesitates is lunch... so if you don't want to be eat by the moster of doubt ya gotta jump!  In or out it makes no matter which, but if you stand at the door to long its going to slam in your face and you're going to be squashed like a grape.
Now, if none of this info is of any concern and this is a poem for the sake of itself... I must say that you've once again written one fine piece of poetry.  As alway my friend, I bow to you and yours.

Michael
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28 posted 1999-12-30 01:18 AM


Have to agree with Andrew on this one.  Seen one too many lonely men walking down the street mumbling "could haves and should haves".  I like the verse and understand your points, the other side just seems far more appealing to me.


Michael

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29 posted 1999-12-30 08:31 AM


hmmmm I almost missed this gem...and knowing your penchant for twists at the end..I was expecting a knock-knock joke  

But its awesome poetry, you know...and doors that are a way in are also a way out when necessary. I hate the sound of a deadbolt, myself  



 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



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30 posted 1999-12-30 09:37 AM


Awfully well writ, Balladeer.

   ~ from one who has spent many a near moment feeling for the doorjamb.

Elizabeth Santos
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31 posted 1999-12-30 09:44 AM


Fictional?  Fantasy?
Will you please just walk in?
If not, I'll give you a boot!
Liz

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32 posted 1999-12-30 09:50 AM


dont walk in just yet!!! looky through the peephole first
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33 posted 2001-06-19 09:48 PM


'Deer dear heart, now here are some that I'd never had read if I wasn't fossiking in the archives. This is great, YOU surely can write, excellent absolutely excellent
Bring them up to the front again love.
Take care
love and warm stuff
Mushy
  

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



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34 posted 2001-11-11 02:27 AM


I stand here just a step away
From everything you pledge
And yet it seems to me I may
Be standing on a ledge

Balladeer, it's always a pleasure to read a poem you've shared with us here and I thank you cuz this is one of those kinda poems that is considered in my mind as a must2read...
Hugs2uPoetFriend
*~coco~*

Balladeer
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35 posted 2001-11-11 06:35 PM


Wow, coco1 You dug deep for this one...and I thank you for doing so   Thank you for your kind words...
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36 posted 2004-06-06 01:50 PM


ah...glad I found this
Broken_Winged_Angel
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37 posted 2005-01-20 05:27 AM


And again, here I am lost in your poems.

This one I had to rush off to send to someone... Thank you for writing long ago what I can't find the words to express now.

~BWA~

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