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The Doorway That is You
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The Doorway That is You |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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There is a door in front of me That wasn't there before Which promises true ecstacy If I walk through that door. It beckons me with love devine If I will but pass through To taste the pleasures that are mine. That door, my dear, is you. I stand here just a step away From everything you pledge And yet it seems to me I may Be standing on a ledge The great unknown lies just beyond Just barely out of view Thin ice that masks a frigid pond? The doorway that is you. It may just be that I am scared I've walked through doors before To find that I was ill-prepared For all that lay in store And, yet, your words invite me so I'm not sure what to do Should I step through or should I go From that door which is you. If hesitation worries you Please try to understand Experiences I've been through Cause me to stay my hand Are you a door to heaven's gate Or to the gates of Hell? Will we find love or learn to hate Each other? Who can tell? So here I stand, with feet of lead Without a single clue Hold back or rush right through, instead The doorway that is you. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
One never knows until they venture through! Quite scarey though, for sure. And for sure, another GREAT POEM!!! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Go halfway through and taste the wine, if it seems like a good year, then sip it ever so slowly. Liz |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this one, Balladeer! I say 'Go through the door'....take a chance...if it will make you happy!  |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well, now..... If stepping through that door is nice and comfy and cozy, why wouldn't you?... Seems like a no-brainer to me...  |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Denise...good response. Thank you. Elizabeth...against the rules. Sometimes you're not allowed to go in halfway and sip the wine. Ever try to go halfway into an elevator? Like it or not, you're going up or down! Sharon...that's the rub. You don't know if it will make you happy or not. Nan...Same thing . Sure, you're right IF you knew it was nice and comfy and cozy. You've seen that guarantee on doors you've passed through? |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
Balladeer the word "if" is just two letters, but sometimes it can stop a lot of sunshine in our lives. Love the poem, and (((HUGS)) to send you courage. B Gravitt |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
More to the point: What will you lose if you don't, or should I say - Can you make work, whatever is left? HUSG < !signature--> Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 12-26-1999).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Balladeer, at least you have a choice...weigh the odds and see which is the better of the two. Sometimes we have no choice but to brave the unknown though. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Balladeer, you might want to just ring the doorbell and wait to see who answers.  }Robert |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
LOL@RobertB. I can understand your hesitation. Well written. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, How does that saying go? A coward suffers a thousand deaths A brave man suffers but one. Your poem is excellent, But they always are. Sy |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I have to say go for it, she's obviously worth alot, to have you writing poetry dear man!! |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Best of luck, Balladeer, with whatever you decide. Fine work, by the way. Elizabeth Nail to the mast her holy flag, Set every threadbare sail- And give her to the god of storms, The lightning and the gale! -Oliver Wendell Holmes |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Betty....you are so right! Rainbow..you don't know what you lose because you never got it to lose it! Hoot...weighing the odds is language I can understand. Thank you. Robert...Now there's something I never thought of! rosesthorns...I thank you. Sy...one or a thousand - you still die! devina....women can be inspirational, for sure. Elizabeth...thanks for the thoughts...but it's only fictional.  |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Chances never taken lead to misery in the end. If it feels so right, you know. Sometimes you have to prepare yourself for what lies beyond that door, but if what is beyond that door, stirs your entire being...you better believe I'd take the risk. Wonderful poem, my dear. (and even if it is fictional..it is all to true in life ) Muy Bien!! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Ok, Balladeer, I'm taking the credit for having inspired this piece. You commented on Portal, so I know you read it and got the inspiration for this, right? Right? LOL, just say yes. I've always wanted to inspire great poetry! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well done Balladeer. Be the captain of your destiny, do not hesitate, run for each new experience Reach inside your heart, that is the greatest gift you can bestow. Merry Christmas.. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Promised ecstacy and love devine....I'd have to walk through.... Another wonderful piece Sir A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well Balladeer...this is a tough one for sure. Mixed emotions and all. No easy decison. You're either happy with what you have in life or not. If not, then take a step through that door! Lots of emotions here, but again, so well written! <*\\\>< Jesus is the reason for the season Keep Christ in CHRISTmas |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Fictional eh? Wow - imagine what would come out if it weren't - if you managed to be so convincing in this, I shudder to think of one of truth...! Lovely lovely work - crafted through yet another of your voices. ~Deep bows of appreciation~ The Severny one. [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-28-1999).] |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
will agree with severn on this one...if this isn't real emotion I can't imagine how one of truth could touch any more....but I do understand, I write many a poem in the abstract world of "if"....maybe someday I will get it together in the real one.....sigh.....beautiful poem... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
This is great, suspenseful, emotional, just wonderful! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
MM....Fictional, huh? Someone somewhere will eternally blessed if they ever land the romantic old you! [This message has been edited by Deb Lynne (edited 12-31-1999).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Shame on you Balladeer for upsetting all these women with your fictional door. I'm for walking through doors myself, even fictional ones. Great poem! |
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Richard Junior Member
since 1999-12-27
Posts 35California |
Absolutely beautiful, Robert. Such meaning. |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Isn't this like the start of any relationship, I can feel your tentativeness. new guy Paul |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Balladeer: He who hesitates is lunch... so if you don't want to be eat by the moster of doubt ya gotta jump! In or out it makes no matter which, but if you stand at the door to long its going to slam in your face and you're going to be squashed like a grape. Now, if none of this info is of any concern and this is a poem for the sake of itself... I must say that you've once again written one fine piece of poetry. As alway my friend, I bow to you and yours. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Have to agree with Andrew on this one. Seen one too many lonely men walking down the street mumbling "could haves and should haves". I like the verse and understand your points, the other side just seems far more appealing to me. Michael |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
hmmmm I almost missed this gem...and knowing your penchant for twists at the end..I was expecting a knock-knock joke But its awesome poetry, you know...and doors that are a way in are also a way out when necessary. I hate the sound of a deadbolt, myself It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Awfully well writ, Balladeer. ~ from one who has spent many a near moment feeling for the doorjamb. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Fictional? Fantasy? Will you please just walk in? If not, I'll give you a boot! Liz |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
dont walk in just yet!!! looky through the peephole first |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
'Deer dear heart, now here are some that I'd never had read if I wasn't fossiking in the archives. This is great, YOU surely can write, excellent absolutely excellent Bring them up to the front again love. love and warm stuff Mushy   Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I stand here just a step away From everything you pledge And yet it seems to me I may Be standing on a ledge Balladeer, it's always a pleasure to read a poem you've shared with us here and I thank you cuz this is one of those kinda poems that is considered in my mind as a must2read... Hugs2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wow, coco1 You dug deep for this one...and I thank you for doing so Thank you for your kind words... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah...glad I found this |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
And again, here I am lost in your poems. This one I had to rush off to send to someone... Thank you for writing long ago what I can't find the words to express now. ~BWA~ |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
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