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Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15

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Tulsa, OK

0 posted 2000-01-25 07:24 PM

       What's a heart to do?

     Alas, to know what to do,
         in matter's of the heart
     so many feelings to consider
         it's not easy to start
     To know the best thing to do,
         hope that I'm sincere,
     To know the right thing to do,
         of that I'm unclear
     To know the safest thing to do,
         if there's feelings to spare
     To know the easiest thing to do,
         so you know that I care
     Ah, forget all this,
         it's easy now to see
     It's the Loving thing to do,
         for a heart to soar free.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-01-25 07:30 PM

This is wonderful, Danny! I love it!

Denise

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2000-01-25 07:33 PM

You got that right Danny!

Bad Boy
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since 2000-01-23

Posts 78

3 posted 2000-01-25 08:10 PM

So much said in so few words.
Good job

The Devil Made Me Do It.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2000-01-25 08:48 PM

Danny-

I was fascinated with this.
I couldn't help but notice
two distinct poems entwined here.
By reading all of the odd-numbered
lines it flows as a complete poem.
Then reading the even-numbered lines
I got an equally complete poem.

Is this something you planned?
If so, I'm not familiar with the form,
but you have inspired me.

Very intriguing.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

5 posted 2000-01-26 10:27 AM

Thanks to those who who shared their comments.
Yes, Marge, I wanted to reflect my indecision, so I altered the tone of the peom. Wasn't sure it would work, but the message was there. Glad you noticed.
Thanks for the response.
DH

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

6 posted 2000-01-26 11:28 AM

Danny, I agree with Marge very interesting, I would never have pulled it off.

Parker

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

7 posted 2000-01-26 11:44 AM

Danny...I really enjoyed this poem of yours. Nicely laid out and it speaks of your heart....never a bad thing in my book

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2000-01-26 11:48 AM

Nice poem.

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

9 posted 2000-01-26 12:35 PM

I too, noticed the interchanging...and found it quite refreshing, and that it added much to your poem. Very well done!

May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

10 posted 2000-01-26 07:11 PM

Danny, you give the reader the very real sense of your inner struggle...very well done!

Claire

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