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In the Moonlight Shadows Dancing
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In the Moonlight Shadows Dancing |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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In the Moonlight Shadows Dancing In the moonlight shadows dancing Prancing wild across my bed Visions of the past entrancing Entomb my room, consume my head You in fanciful romancing Moments rationed, passion dared Gloom has strewn the moon's enchanting Ashen shadows, passion shared Entranced was I at your first glancing Slow advancing 'cross the room You danced and took a step perchancing Flower in bloom you would consume Now exhumed, the visions prancing So entrancing is the sight In the moonlight shadows dancing 'Cross my bed in deep of night Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-25-2000).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoy your poem!!!!!!  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Lovely internal and external rhyme, wonderful rhythm...challange well met in this wonderfully written poem |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend- Your beautiful poem was better than the 'Blue Plate Special' at the diner down the road. (And I didn't have to leave a tip !) You know you're addicted when you'd rather read poetry than eat ! Absolutely enchanting ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Elizabeth!! Welcome to the 'dancing circle'. Ruth really came up with a great challenge that seems to be sparking many people's creative imaginations! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Vandana, Thanks for your kind remark and for your lovely e-mail Liz Hoot, Thanks so much, this one was a little slow coming. Marge, I have got to tell you, that is absolutley the finest compliment I have ever had. Just imagine, writing a poem that's better than the "blue plate special" at the local diner. I feel that I am rising in stature as a poet. Thank you so much for such unworthy praise (hehe-you crack me up!) Love ya, Liz Denise, Thank you, but your "dancing" poem was exquisite. I love it Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-25-2000).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So glad you found time to visit Ruth's "circle"...I will have to edit my first version to include all of the members who've come in since Monday...LOL! Good job, Elizabeth S.! [By the way, I've given you a little nickname - "The Wise Elizabeth" who knows all, sees all, and can read Sy's mind!] Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--I knew you would succumb to this wonderful phrase and come up with something that captured it completely. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--I knew you would succumb to this wonderful phrase and come up with something that captured it completely. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Acutely beautiful, Elizabeth...painful and poignant, exquisitely fashioned. Once again, you've taken my breath with your words... Claire |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Elizabeth, this is amazing. I really enjoyed it. -SEA |
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Bad Boy Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 78 |
It seems everyone(even Toe) is having Moonlight Shadow Dances? This is another that is very well written.  But it`s still not gunna soften this guy up  Thank`s for sharing Elizabeth The Devil Made Me Do It. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Elizabeth: Superb reply "In the moonlight shadows dancing 'Cross my bed in deep of night" Oh my...that line will stay with me.. HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, This is poetry as poetry should be. As pure as the foam on the waves at sea. And if I were a shadow upon your bed, I would build you a palace within your head. Dance you forever into the night. And only you could turn on the light. Love Sy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sunshine, Thanks,dear,for such sweet remarks. Yeh, I wish I knew what was going through his head. Martie, Such high praise for a poet with no words. Thanks Claire, Wow, such kind comments. Thanks Bad Boy, Just give it a little time. Thanks for the comments Rainbow, dear, you are so sweet to say this after your absolutely marvelous poem. Thanks so much Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, Thank you for the beautiful response. A poem to consume my head Love ya, Liz |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Liz, absolutely exquisite!  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Eloise, Thank you so much for the "exquisite" Liz |
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