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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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Frustration courts my spirit’s consternation Eliciting ever familiar dismay’s desperation Caused by our soul’s constant disjunction Bleeding me upon the thorns of compunction The heart – from emotions – you silently eviscerate Goal’s intent upon solely to exacerbate Celebration’s glee goads you to immolate The beating prize my walls sought to isolate So due to my nature’s undying skepticism Alone – I stand – behind my veil of stoicism May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
I enjoyed this clear and wonderful poem very much  |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
I to enjoyed this very much...tracie |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Very well done!!! *S* |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Satiate, this is wonderful. Your message is loud and clear! I like!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Satiate! Superb writing! Denise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
This made me grab for my dictionary, but now that I understand every word of it, I can only say....great writing Satiate ! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Thanks all! May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Satiate, I enjoyed this, and the suffix play was interesting. Claire |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
N - I like this - it is strong and clear and intelligently written. Well done! K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I know these sentiments well, Nicole ... brilliantly written, your character shines in this. --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You said a mouthful here, Satiate, and you said it very well. |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
This is a very interesting piece. I found myself reading it more than once and coming up with more than one meaning. Well written. G |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Satiate, another fine job of rendering Inspiration's quiet whispering into a well-written medium. Not only is this piece educational, as can be seen from the various replies you've received, but also well-balanced. You've stated your theme succintly. Some would say that such terse verse is harder to write than say a longish ode, and in many ways, they would be right. Again, wonderful job, and keep em coming. Alicat As I sit here dimly thinking Watching modem lights a-blinking Churning out poetic hash. Lord, in all Your piety, Help me keep my sanity: Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
If I knew what half those words meant, Im sure I'd be saying how beautiful and amaizing and excellent it was |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
*gets out her dictionary, fumbles through the pages* Ah...okay Nicely written and man would I love to have a vocabulary like that. I reamin the poor simpilton here...oh well |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Claire - Thank you, I enjoyed toying w/ the different words to use. K - Why thank you m'friend! Kess - Thank you dear Lady, your compliment means much! (lol, and your understanding!) 'Deer - (blushing) Thank you - a well done coming from a poet such as yourself leaves me quite honored. G.A. - Thanks! I'm very glad you saw more than one meaning.Ali - Why thankee, kind sir OWU - Thank you!Ruth - (laughing) Thank you. I had to use the dictionary a couple times myself writing this one...but shhhh...don't tell, k?May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Despite a darkened veil, you shine brightly. In your poetry, in your friendship, you are a star burning intensly! Awesome! |
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