Love Hurts.......a Villanelle.

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Open Poetry #5

Love Hurts.......a Villanelle.

Travis
Junior Member

since 1999-06-14

Posts 17

0 posted 2000-01-24 10:29 PM

Love Hurts

You wonder why my heart hurts me so,
Why all that is within me has died.
And you wonder why I can’t let go.

There are many things you just don’t know,
So many times I’ve been cast aside.
You wonder why my heart hurts me so.

My life has been at an all time low.
It seems as if every love has lied.
And you wonder why I can’t let go.

Tales of love I can simply forgo.
Love hurts, as I have often implied
You wonder why my heart hurts me so.

As love runs from me, my heart in tow,
My body weeps, my soul torn inside.
And you wonder why I can’t let go.

Ask me to love? The answer is “no”
Too many nights I have sat and cried.
You wonder why my heart hurts me so
And you wonder why I can’t let go.

Robert Harden

Travis
Junior Member

since 1999-06-14

Posts 17

1 posted 2000-01-24 10:33 PM

I posted this villanelle poem yesterday. It was my first attempt at this poetry style. With Beki's help, she critiqued the original, and helped me understand the style more fully. At any rate, I just wanted to re-post this poem with the revisions. It was a difficult and satisfying challenge. I hope you enjoy. Beki, thank you.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-01-24 11:36 PM

This is a wonderful villanelle, Travis! I enjoyed this version as well!

Denise

One Who Understands
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa

3 posted 2000-01-25 12:34 PM

I think the changes help it flow more easily...but the content remains superb!

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