Open Poetry #5 |
A crying soul |
whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
"A crying soul" Lost to me I can not see Just what it is That lost your kiss Did I stray Not to this day No more song To you I'm gone Past in time No more to find Without you near No more cheer An empty space A frowning face Left to repair A heart's despair Not to stay Myself this way Lost to you Inside Im blue No sun I see Dark to me Feeling gloom The loss of you |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
very good, I like this....course I am feeling gloomy, so it suits me well.....sigh |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thanks Iloveit , I hope your gloom subsides and you feel happiness again soon |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Sad poem and good job of it too. Welcome to Passions and you're very pretty too! Nathan |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
I like it! Very lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
So sad for the soul, but remember there is always more love and happiness just around the corner At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato) ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thank you for your kind words [This message has been edited by whiskey (edited 12-29-1999).] |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Great poem Whiskey! Sad, but great! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
I really enjoy your style, very unique, very deep yet to the point. Paul |
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destiny502 Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 57OH |
wonderful poem as always! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A sad yet beautiful poem! Denise |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Very good, bittersweet and touching. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Great poem Whiskey - sad but it seems to suit my mood lol ( you read the poem that I posted) Hey, Moonshine Whiskey - lol we'd be illegal in some states of America lol |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thanks to everyone for all your nice replies |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Whiskey, this is very sad and very beautiful!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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neitham Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 42India |
Whiskey, Very crisp, very beautifully written and u look simply divine Admiringly, neitham |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thank you Dark angel Thanks Neithem you flatter me |
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