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HelmutB
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0 posted 2000-01-24 06:55 PM


Shadow

The night has left soft and silence fills the chamber.
Daylight broke, as always and forever.
I see a shadow lingering there on that wall.
Gloaming in the fading night seems hardly real at all.
I cannot believe is this all true?
The shadow on the wall, it’s you.
Candles burned down long ago.
But your shadow remains
Shiver fills my veins
I wish the shadow would disappear.
That I could see you, you would be here.
Shadow; shadow on the wall, you in beautiful disguise.
Thousand fold, and more, I begin to realize.
But to hold a shadow is only an illusion.
I feel my heart beating, questing for conclusion.
If I could hold your shadow near.
I could pretend it’s you my dear.
I wish so much you could be on my side.
I would carry you and hold you tight.

I wish I could say,
“The shadow it’s all what’s there.”
“ I rather have you, …to share.”
“ If I could hold you in my arm.”
“ Hold you close and keep you warm.”
“ I can forget the shadow, pasted to that wall.”
You could push it away, I will fall.

But for now, the shadow has to do.
Cause’s it’s the only thing I have of you.
I hope to hold you soon in my reality,
The shadow is just history

Memories of you, ..I have. That’s all.  
There are melting with the shadow, …there on that wall.



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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Balladeer
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1 posted 2000-01-24 07:05 PM


Finely crafted writing, Helmut. Past loves are like shadows....spectres of our past...outlines of a reality we used to know.
They can appear so real we almost think we can reach out and touch them but, when we do, we realize that they are only shadows and remnants of happier days. Needless to say, your poem made me think. I thank you.

Martie
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2 posted 2000-01-24 07:40 PM


I enjoyed reading this Helmut.  Some times those shadows can help us understand the real thing.
Denise
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3 posted 2000-01-24 08:30 PM


I enjoyed this Helmut! Nicely done!  

Denise

Anne
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4 posted 2000-01-24 09:49 PM


Great job!  I really liked this one!
First__Knight
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5 posted 2000-01-24 09:52 PM


oh nice job......

 
I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because
people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking
into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary
insanity.



hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 2000-01-24 09:52 PM


helmut...a finely crafted poem here my friend  
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2000-01-24 10:01 PM


Helmut,
Well done and I agree with Ballader.
I know all about shadows but like you
I prefer the real thing.

WhtDove
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8 posted 2000-01-24 11:13 PM


Wow Helmut! I especially loved those last 2 verses! Touched home with me!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark



HelmutB
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9 posted 2000-01-25 06:30 AM


Thank you to you all for the kind words, my heart beats a lot faster.

Balladeer
your right this is a piece from my past, the shadow is real now. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Martie, Denise and Anne
Thank you for your kind comments

First Knight and Hoot_owl_rn
Ehm, don't you two have other poems to do....,eh? (lol) Thank you for reading mine.

Seymour
I'm glad you liked it. We seem to be alike, if I may say so. To imagine, to see shadows is that what keeps our world turning.
Except, your a lot better with words.  

WhtDove
Thank you, If I touched home, I touched your soul. Hopefully these are good shadows.
  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Marge Tindal
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10 posted 2000-01-25 06:47 AM


Helmut Becker, my friend-

This is just beautiful !
My, how you've captured elusive shadows
that are real to us all.

I especially found a fondness for:

'But to hold a shadow is only an illusion.
I feel my heart beating, questing for conclusion.'

Wonderful job.
~*Marge*~

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11 posted 2000-01-25 07:04 AM


This is wonderful, Helmut... Well done!!
HelmutB
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12 posted 2000-01-25 10:29 PM


Marge
Thank you for your wonderful reply. You are special.

suthern
Thank you for the kind words, I'm still  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Gemini
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13 posted 2000-01-25 11:18 PM


A most excellent poem, one which I can relate to first hand.  Thank you for sharing.
Meadowmuse
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14 posted 2000-01-26 01:04 AM


(Dear Helmut, Part 2) lol  

I loved this piece...the way you've shared your shadow here gives one to recall other times, other places, shadow and light and faces. Thank you, dear Helmut.

Claire

tracie66
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15 posted 2000-01-26 02:32 AM


Oh Helmut
so touching, beautifully written.
Tracie  

Elizabeth Santos
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16 posted 2000-01-26 06:51 AM


Very well written, Helmut, somtimes you just want to grab onto a shadow. Sometimes we remember things the way we want to remember them. Some shadows are just illusions, some are real. But either way they are haunting. I enjoyed this poem
Liz

HelmutB
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17 posted 2000-01-26 01:15 PM


I was happy to see all your replies. Shadows are something special. And so are you all to me. Thank you

Your surely are a family of friends.
May all your days be as bright as the sun shines down on a hot summer day

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


JamesMichael
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18 posted 2000-01-26 04:33 PM


You have created an overshadowing illusion.
I really enjoyed reading this.  James

Nan
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19 posted 2000-01-27 06:45 PM


Sehr gut, Herr Becker. Ich mag es...
HelmutB
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20 posted 2000-01-27 07:16 PM


James
Thank you for your overshadowing responce, I'm glad you liked it

Nan
This is stunning

"Frau Nan, ich muss wohl nicht betonen wie sehr ich mich ueber Ihre Nachricht gefreut habe. Ich Danke Ihnen von ganzem Herzen."

Shall we let the others guess?


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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