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Shadow on the wall |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Shadow The night has left soft and silence fills the chamber. Daylight broke, as always and forever. I see a shadow lingering there on that wall. Gloaming in the fading night seems hardly real at all. I cannot believe is this all true? The shadow on the wall, it’s you. Candles burned down long ago. But your shadow remains Shiver fills my veins I wish the shadow would disappear. That I could see you, you would be here. Shadow; shadow on the wall, you in beautiful disguise. Thousand fold, and more, I begin to realize. But to hold a shadow is only an illusion. I feel my heart beating, questing for conclusion. If I could hold your shadow near. I could pretend it’s you my dear. I wish so much you could be on my side. I would carry you and hold you tight. I wish I could say, “The shadow it’s all what’s there.” “ I rather have you, …to share.” “ If I could hold you in my arm.” “ Hold you close and keep you warm.” “ I can forget the shadow, pasted to that wall.” You could push it away, I will fall. But for now, the shadow has to do. Cause’s it’s the only thing I have of you. I hope to hold you soon in my reality, The shadow is just history Memories of you, ..I have. That’s all. There are melting with the shadow, …there on that wall. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Finely crafted writing, Helmut. Past loves are like shadows....spectres of our past...outlines of a reality we used to know. They can appear so real we almost think we can reach out and touch them but, when we do, we realize that they are only shadows and remnants of happier days. Needless to say, your poem made me think. I thank you. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I enjoyed reading this Helmut. Some times those shadows can help us understand the real thing. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I enjoyed this Helmut! Nicely done!  Denise |
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Anne Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 78 |
Great job! I really liked this one! |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
oh nice job...... I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary insanity. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
helmut...a finely crafted poem here my friend |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Helmut, Well done and I agree with Ballader. I know all about shadows but like you I prefer the real thing. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wow Helmut! I especially loved those last 2 verses! Touched home with me! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Thank you to you all for the kind words, my heart beats a lot faster. Balladeer your right this is a piece from my past, the shadow is real now. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Martie, Denise and Anne Thank you for your kind comments First Knight and Hoot_owl_rn Ehm, don't you two have other poems to do....,eh? (lol) Thank you for reading mine. Seymour I'm glad you liked it. We seem to be alike, if I may say so. To imagine, to see shadows is that what keeps our world turning. Except, your a lot better with words. WhtDove Thank you, If I touched home, I touched your soul. Hopefully these are good shadows. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Helmut Becker, my friend- This is just beautiful ! My, how you've captured elusive shadows that are real to us all. I especially found a fondness for: 'But to hold a shadow is only an illusion. I feel my heart beating, questing for conclusion.' Wonderful job. ~*Marge*~ < !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 01-25-2000).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is wonderful, Helmut... Well done!! |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Marge Thank you for your wonderful reply. You are special. suthern Thank you for the kind words, I'm still The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
A most excellent poem, one which I can relate to first hand. Thank you for sharing. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
(Dear Helmut, Part 2) lol I loved this piece...the way you've shared your shadow here gives one to recall other times, other places, shadow and light and faces. Thank you, dear Helmut. Claire |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Helmut so touching, beautifully written. Tracie |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very well written, Helmut, somtimes you just want to grab onto a shadow. Sometimes we remember things the way we want to remember them. Some shadows are just illusions, some are real. But either way they are haunting. I enjoyed this poem Liz |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I was happy to see all your replies. Shadows are something special. And so are you all to me. Thank you Your surely are a family of friends. May all your days be as bright as the sun shines down on a hot summer day The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have created an overshadowing illusion. I really enjoyed reading this. James |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sehr gut, Herr Becker. Ich mag es...  |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
James Thank you for your overshadowing responce, I'm glad you liked it Nan This is stunning "Frau Nan, ich muss wohl nicht betonen wie sehr ich mich ueber Ihre Nachricht gefreut habe. Ich Danke Ihnen von ganzem Herzen." Shall we let the others guess? The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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