Open Poetry #5 |
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paper teardrops |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
her fingers tired of composing the too many paper teardrops needed to cleanse the ache that had sprung from far deeper than she really cared to know and she felt over exposed and slightly chilled at the abandoning of so many emotions, so many tears and so she slipped back into her jacket stuck her hands deep into the pockets and as she walked away thought, I should have known better my hands always hurt when they get cold this will be my last one, *she says with a sigh and soft smile* thanks all for your help and support [This message has been edited by fc (edited 01-24-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...this is an incredible piece of poetry ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This would be powerful even without the teardrop shaped verse. *S* I hope those abandoned emotions left spaces to be filled joy so great all aches will be forgotten! |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
thanks both of you, your comments mean much to me ![]() |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
The teardrop cleanses as it falls but still it leaves a stain emotion behind the built up wall free-falling haphazardly splashing freeing you from pain HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
very well put RG, but what to do behind the wall when the rain ends?.....sigh....would almost rather cry than not be able to hugs and love |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Such a wonderful piece, fc! Joy "To you, my children, These lovely flowers I give. Prune ye my vines and fig trees, With care my flowerets tend, But keep the pathway open, Your home is at the end." -Robert Frost (from: God's Garden) |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
thanks joy and thanks all.... fc bids adieu |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
I couldn't let fc go without a farewell ... you left beautiful and deep footprints in this forum fc ... I pray your path will lead towards a better future. ![]() |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very, very beautiful, indeed. What a joy to read LIz |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
What ya mean ya "bid adieu?"....Get your sweet ass back here young lady...Now, if you've got a hair appointment or something....sure, I know in your case that could take a very long time...but after that?....Yea, you better be back or I'll flood your email with nasty, naughty panting and breathing and nekkid pictures of LongJohn and all the other terrible things I can think of....do you hear me lady!!!?? |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
FC- This is truly a wonderful, artistically presented work of art. The words are delicate morsels to be savored and then to have it served it in such a lovely ~crystal dish~ is the creme de la creme. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
oh, FC....this is beautifully tragic...you are so talented, I hope you will be gracing our "pages" again real soon. "The finest qualities of our nature, like the bloom on fruits, can be preserved only by the most delicate handling. Yet, we do not treat ourselves nor another thus tenderly." ~Henry David Thoreau |
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