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Eternal Dance (Oh no, not another one)
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Eternal Dance (Oh no, not another one) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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(Sorry everyone...I've been so inspired by the replies to my challange and quite frankly, intrigued by the rhythm I can create with the challange line...so here it goes, one more to my challange  )Eternal Dance In the moonlight, shadows dancing Their bodies intertwined as one Two together, now romancing Their moonlit waltz has just begun In the moonlight, they are swaying In this dance they’ve danced before No sound, no rhythm, no music playing They tread as one, the two, once more In the moonlight, shadows dancing In quiet stillness, watch them now Their fluid motion, so entrancing The dance, it seems, a sacred vow In the moonlight, tears are falling And she murmurs, cries his name He pulls her closer as she’s calling It all has changed, but yet’s the same In the moonlight, shadows dancing Her voice to him, it does implore As time and morning are advancing She whispers to him, “Evermore” In the moonlight, watch them swaying No longer are they flesh and bones While underground, their bodies laying Here amongst the aged tombstones In the moonlight, shadows dancing Things happen that we can’t explain So two souls, discovery chancing Kiss, as it begins to rain In the moonlight, Love has risen As daylight breaks, they disappear They’ve now released their earthly prison Or were they ever really here? < !signature--> At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-24-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Most amazing Ruth you have outdone yourself with this one. Your talent dances in the moonlight as we all cherish your inspiration and ability to transform words into masterpieces. |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
poems as this are so beautiful that they hurt when love is what you don't have...sigh...really well done ruth |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ruth, the title, the words, the tone, the rhythm, the story...borne of a rare gift and a treasured talent. Thank you! Claire |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ruth what I can say at your talent? You certainly have been inspired! Excellent writing my friend, I've enjoyed them all! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
with each new entry you break new ground. Such beautiful words must come from a wonderful person. Thank you Richard |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Oh, Ruth, I adore this! What a lovely tale of eternal love. What is it they say? Nobody ever said love has to die. It reminds me of those ghost stories we used to tell around the campfire. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
As with all your work, a joy to read, and reread. 4 Stars again! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Entrancing dancing! Sooo beautiful, Ruth! Denise |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Another beautiful poem,Ruth!!!!!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Another beautiful poem,Ruth!!!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow Ruth, this is exceptional! |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
That's awesome! I liked this one a lot! Thanks! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, what can one say in the presence of The Wizard of The Word? Well, a few things, maybe. First, on a scale of 1-10 - 100! Second, you leave us all in the dust with this piece of magic. Third, I would make one change, but won't say what unless you really want to know. Fourth, PUBLISH, PUBLISH, PUBLISH! Fine piece, this, Ruth! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Another great one Ruth. The line has been haunting me as well but I have choosen to leave it lie for now. Thankyou for this beautiful piece of writing. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Ruth, this is beautiful dear freind!! absolutely!!! as always. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Bad Boy Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 78 |
This has it all. romance,love,dancing and a hint of sex,well maybe not sex? That could just be me?  I really enjoy`d this one  Another great one in the book`s for HOOT. Thank ya Hoot< !signature--> The Devil Made Me Do It. [This message has been edited by Bad Boy (edited 01-24-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Another gem from the treasure chest of your mind Ruth! Amazing what you can pull out of a single phrase! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Wow -- what a story! Brilliant, and heartrending as well ... I do have one question, though, hun ... seems to me (being a rhythm freak) that in line 10, you meant to say "quiet" rather than "quite," or am I missing something ...? Love this -- adding to favorites. --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Kess...thank you, that was a typo on my side, yes, it is quiet. I have deslexic fingers at times, they type words out of order...lol...thanks for your great comments Sunshine...what can I say, you flatter me. I'd love to see your suggestion you have to offer. I never turn down any help Everyone else...Thank you all so much. Rarrely do I write anything that I am very content wit, that makes me happy or proud of my work. For some reason, this piece is one of those rare occasions. Thanks for your overwhelming support of it |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
The only thing better than this in the writing was hearing you read it to me by phone just last night... Love it Ruth I don't buy temporary insanity as they murder defense. Because people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary insanity. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
As I said earlier, it is true perfection, Ruth, a poem to be proud of. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks David, not sure whether that was a treat or not...me reading it, but thanks Balladeer...perfection? Nah, but thanks for your wonderful comment and I am proud of it At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Absolutely fantastic! Thank you for this poem. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Sorry I'm late with my responce I surely like to Dance (French spoken) But what you do with words there way way up there above My feet could not dance so fast my dove I like the way you play with words You sure know how it works Well done there Hugs and Love The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Wow Ruth, that was just awesome..!! The medley of words was so visual and gave me goosebumps..!!! I agree with sunshine, I too think you should publish this dear.. |
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