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In the Moonlight, Shadows Dancing
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In the Moonlight, Shadows Dancing |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
In the Moonlight, Shadows DancingIn the moonlight, shadows dancing against the dampened pane listening, living, within your breathing, each breath a tortured strain. Thinking on the lives below us just there, upon the street in the darkened evening's chorus Hear God's merciful retreat. What of the times we've been among them? Busily moving in heartful haste and now, as precious beats remind us not one moment was set to waste. For just now, in shadows' dance with moon and Earth's revolving race do I love you more than the tenderest touch or the most honoring embrace. I love your wracked and crackling gasps inflamed, of bitter blood the stench of decay from within your lungs I loathe and also love. And now as time is edging nigh and as our mortal endings start in the moonlight, shadows dancing Love, eternally, hold my heart.  Claire |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...when I issued the challange, I never dreamed I'd get something this hauntingly dark out of it. Wow...what another twist to the line, thank you, wonderfully done and a fine response to the challange  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Hoot Owl. You know, I really wasn't going for "dark" with this...guess it just came out that way. Losing a love is darkness, yes, but so much was light in the life we shared. Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Love and devotion through all of life, the light and the dark is true love. To find such a love is the greatest gift we can possess in this life. This poem speaks that love and devotion. Well done, Claire. Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well done, funny how what comes out sometime isn't what we aiming for! Great job nontheless! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Breathtaking! I could picture two people, who've shared a lifetime of love, trying to let go of each other. It made me think of my grandparents. Grandpa has alzheimers and his wife has lung cancer. Timeless tale of love! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire, you have touched my heart with the truth of your devotion and given me a glimse into your soul. This is sooo beautiful! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Claire, your words always amaze me. I just love this one too. Parker |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise...thank you. Yes, light and dark must indeed abide together within a lifelong love. WhtDove...thank you so much for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Tara...yes, your grandparents, I'm sure, would know a love like this. Thank you so for reading and responding. Martie...thank you, Martie, for your kind thoughts here. So glad my poem touched your heart. Parker...Thanks for reading and responding, and for such a generous response. Claire |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Claire, my this is beautiful!! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Echo. This challenge thingy is kind of fun, huh? Claire |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
It most certainly is, though I am kind of stuck on one right now LoL, but I'm getting there =) Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire- What a beautiful answer to the challenge. Your love for your lost one just made the moonbeams shine a little brighter. ~*~ ~In The Moonlight Shadows Dancing~ ~Sound of music from above~ ~In The Moonlight Shadows Dancing~ ~Returning thoughts of precious love~ ~Dancing shadows on moonlight bear~ ~Lovely memories that you shared~ ~In The moonbeams shadows glancing~ ~In the Moonlight Shadows Dancing~ ~*~ ~*~ Marge ~*~ ~*~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Echo...not to worry, I'm certain it will be as lovely as all the rest of your work! Marge...what a wonderful verse you've written here, thank you! I enjoy spontanaeity, and yours is always grand! Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Claire, You are an amazing poet. I pray your poet pen never stops flowing. Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Elizabeth...Thank you kindly, Madam, but I can assure you it is all done with spirit gum and mirrors. Take care, Claire |
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