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Shadow-Dancing (Hoot's Challenge) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Ok Ruth, hope you don't mind, but I modified your phrase a tiny bit... I wanted to make it a Vilanelle, so I just took away one little bitty "s," to make it "shadow," instead of "shadows." Hope that doesn't disqualify me!!!  In the moonlight, shadow-dancing Faerie form cavorts upon the ground With gait graceful, so entrancing. Forever she sways, romancing. Her hips seducing men, spellbound In the moonlight, shadow-dancing. Each night she spends a-prancing Atop the prison where she’s bound With gait graceful, so entrancing. Yearning to break free and glancing For love to join her, ever-bound In the moonlight shadow-dancing. So she spends her time a-chancing Screaming her anguish with no sound With gait graceful, so entrancing. Until then, never advancing She moves silently, flower-crowned In the moonlight, shadow-dancing With gait graceful, so entrancing. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher This is sheer beauty dancing. Light, lilting and lovely. What a pleasing poem to greet my morn. Ahhhhhhhhh ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Delicately crafted and poetically seductive, your faerie, shadow~dancing. Enjoyed this very much! (and a belated Happily Birthlday to you!) Claire |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Looks like a villanelle to me, sir ...  And a good one too -- course you know you can never go wrong with me as long as you use "faeries" as your subject! I agree with Marge, what a lovely way to wake up! --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...a villanelle, and a great one to boot. Thanks Christopher, it's wonderful Challange well met.BTW...HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is superb! I know!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Enchanting shadow dancing, Christopher! Simply beautiful! Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Christopher your talent is endless! Excellent! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wonderfully done Chris! I feel my own response to Hoot's challange pales compared to this. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very well done Christopher! Excellent poetry! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Beautiful, and a tad bit seductive dear, looks a challenge well met!!! So graceful doth your poetry flow Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I have to agree w/ everyone else m'friend, this is beautiful - but hauntingly so...it made me sad, she's trapped and can't 'get out'...you write w/ eloquence m'dear, very much enjoyed the read. May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Wow I didn't think It could get any better than Ruth's...I stand corrected (No offense of course Ruth ) |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This had a great atmosphere of sensuality to it. I enjoyed reading it. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I am impressed. An unusual take - and it works well. K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Oscar Wilde Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 31San Francisco |
Is there nothing you can't do. I never heard of this style before but I like it. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 well done! |
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