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A Voice From The Deep
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A Voice From The Deep |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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One sailed forth into life that day < !signature-->Who offered friendship's hand to me Sincerity rolled like the sea In waves that washed the fear away. So gentle was this tide I'd found I knew no safeguards need I take In soothing ever gentle wake I felt as though on solid ground. At last I sensed no need to hide To batten down the inner self To stow away on some dark shelf The me that was recessed inside. Uncharted was, to me, this course Through many fathoms darkly deep Yet still no secrets did I keep I felt the anchor's weighted force. Now in the choppy seas I flail Preservers gone - they'd all been tossed A lesson learn from one who's lost Still shipwrecks happen in the gale. Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-20-2000).] |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
I wrote something somewhat similar waaaaaaay back in Open 2. But it wasn't nearly this beautiful and poetic. It's good to be back. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Always a pleasure to read you D! A thought came to mind that I'll share... The opening.. One sailed forth into life that day.. Have your way with it  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Enjoyed this one very much!! Well done! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
How sad, to reveal secrets, only to have them tossed overboard. Unfortunate for the one on the horizon, who may not have those secrets shared. Really enjoyed reading this poem. A glimpse into the heart. DH |
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Earthtones Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 10 |
Ahhhh!You set my soul at ease with that one.The ocean is a big part of my life, and I'm sure this is true of you as well. Reading that poem brought back memories of glass calm seas, both night and day. I think I'll print this one out.Ahhhhh..... |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Denise, I really like this. Beautifully written yet a melancholy ending without bitterness. Nicely done Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Rob - Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! What is the title of yours? L.R. - Thanks so much! I like that better, too! Suthern - Thanks a bunch for your always kind words! Danny - Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Earthtones - I'm glad you liked it! Yes, the ocean's in my soul, but sadly not close enough geographically. WildChild - Thanks for your kind words! And you're right - no bitterness - just yet another sad lesson learned. Thanks again, everybody! I always appreciate your reading and commenting!  Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is very beautiful Denise...I love the sea, my dream house would be perched in clear view of it...but, as you well know, I'd have to leave PA to do it...lol Nice poem  |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
sigh, this is beautiful, happy for you, sad for me....I used to have this.....or I guess maybe a pretense of such...sigh |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Denise, what a beautiful poem! I truly enjoyed it! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It is sad that we open doors that hurt but still inside the pain a lesson of the heart remains nothing lost then nothing gained. Beautiful poem Denise! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you, Ruth, FC, Echo and Martie for reading and for your lovely comments! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Ruth- wouldn't that be lovely?....it's my dream too....*sigh* Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Yes...this is bittersweet and beautiful Denise.. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Loved this poem Denise ! Maybe the lesson was sad, it made you write a beautiful poem, so something good came out of it, right ? |
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Cutie Putootie Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 54Ohio |
I must say even though I am computer illiterate I sure can fine the pretty colors and fonts on this thing. I must say snyder this is an excellant written poem, and since I enjoy posting more than I do writing I'll start reading more of your poems and posting. I must say this place is very nice. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you Pepper, Munda and Cutie for reading and commenting! I'm glad that you liked it! Pepper - I'll go to sleep tonight dreaming of Florida! Munda - I always look for that silver lining too! Cutie - very pretty colors and fonts to choose from! It is fun, isn't it?! |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Beautiful Denise. If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW! this is incrediblemy favorite, ahh i have to read it again |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
dsnyder, I have to agree with everyone, it's very beautifully written. I know how it feels to be tossed overboard!!! All I can say is, at least we open up ourselves, I would rather have loved, even if the other doesn't love us back, than never to have loved at all! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise- Differently lovely from your quill. Really a 'thinker' poem. Thank you for this. I couldn't help being reminded of the phrase, 'sink or swim'. Sometimes we get so lost in the sea of emotion that we can sink. I'm thankful that you're a ~swimmer~. Love ~Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Lynn- thanks so much! Kevin- thanks for the WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW! Tulip- yes, it still is better, you're right! Marge- yes, I have learned to swim very well! Thanks for the lovely poem! I'm glad you all enjoyed it! Thanks again! Denise |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Excellent Little did I know, I would find such a sea of creative friends |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sometimes we just choose the wrong ship to set sail upon, don't we???.... Nice one, Denise... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you One Who Understands and Nan for your kind comments! It is always appreciated! Nan- Yep, sometimes we surely do!! Denise |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Denise this is wonderfull, I really love your use of the sea for this poem. Parker |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you Parker, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Denise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
May I add my kudos to this fine piece? You cover many emotions here, not the least of them, the possibility of drowning in one's own aftermath. I have much to do to catch up with you. Well done! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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You may add your commments to my work anytime you'd like to Sunshine! I'm flattered! Thanks for reading and commenting! It is always appreciated! Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Now that you figured out this URL stuff, I'm glad you sent this to me! I'm sorry I missed it! But I have it now, and you write an incredible piece on a sad lesson! God Bless you Denise! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks, Rebecca! I'm glad you liked it! Now, between you and Cindy I am learning about these dang computers!! Denise |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad I ran across this |
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