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forgive the interruption, figured the babe had a POV
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forgive the interruption, figured the babe had a POV |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Next World The babe in the womb in his bath does grow. Sensing incompleteness a break in the flow. He wonders at murmurs thrills to Mother’s sweet touch. Understanding the loving and the need to rush. He shares the decision to try making him whole. At rest with the knowledge his repairman must know. On the day of the surgery his world is aflame. His heart beats furiously as his bath is drained. Then, oh eureka the brillant steel enters. Tomorrow’s portal does open bringing coldness of winter. He reachs to the light tiny handfull of soul. Knowing in the instant he will be made whole. Touching the hand of God the babe rests assured. Tucked safely back into his bath he dreams of next world. DJBurt 1/00 (all rights reserved) there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
DJ, quite an astonishing and powerful piece. I am anxiously awaiting your next post! Corinne |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice to see the other side of this story...I can't imagine what the whole thing would have been like to see. An arm, the size of a pencil with a tiny hand reaching out to grasp the surgeons large hands...must have been overwhelming. I think it would have humbled everyone  |
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Anne Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 78 |
What a beautiful, powerful poem! And I love that title...so fitting...it speaks. |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thank you for allowing the interruption... when i read the challenge and the beauty of Hoot's reply..i felt an uncanny sense of what the child must have thought... thanks again, b there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great! And from the baby's perspective! Quite unique! Well done! Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-23-2000).] |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Bravo! I love this. The image of a child, not yet born, reaching out to touch the hand of God and knowing all is safe, is overwhelming. Beautiful, thank you for sharing this. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Wow Dan!! This is really intense. I never thought of it from the baby's pov. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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