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Return to Me!!
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Return to Me!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Return to Me!! You called to me that night, that night, when the stars were shining ever bright You called my name, And you made the wind blow Wildly through my hair And you disturbed the still air Your voice, husky Ringing through my head Are you , Could you be? my loved one Dead? Dark Angel What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Full of yearning, I get the feeling that there's more to this one than you say!! Beautifuly written as always! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Bad Boy Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 78 |
Im kinda lost on this one  Im not sure if your talking about a loved one that has passed on or a love that`s gone sour? Either way it`s well written.  [This message has been edited by Bad Boy (edited 01-23-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful..so haunting!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Angel, Dark thoughts, good poem. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel- This is so lovely. ~Spirits~ return on the wind to touch our hearts again. Absolutely it must have been the loving touch of departed friend. ~Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This one reads so smoothly...but yet is so haunting |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
and you made the wind blow wildly through my hair--I could almost feel it myself-- Well done! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Filled with a yearning that I could feel! Well done, Dark Angel! Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wonderful DA, and hauting too! |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
This one really made me think. Great job  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'd like to thank you all for taking the time to read this and thank you all for your lovely replies, they are always appreciated. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
WOW DA, This is so beautiful - and haunting. Well done. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
What can I say that hasn't already been said? This is lovely and haunting, only I am not sure about the ending, seems to lose some momentum there, like maybe as was suggested above there is more to it, something missing...not sure. But it is beautiful all the same. |
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