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Kevin Taylor
Member

since 1999-12-23

Posts 185
near Vancouver, BC, Canada

0 posted 2000-01-22 10:02 PM

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The last thought to form before goodbye
will not recall the lover's kiss
nor mark the dappled shadowfall of bright September days
nor recognise the metal taste of blood
beneath your tongue
Neither newsreels nor slideshows
achievements
failures
money
possessions
friends
nor anything you've had.
The last thought will be the "didn't do" -
not the failure.
The unacknowledged plan.
The incomplete.
The dream.
The arms outstretched
and the empty palm.
The goal left unattended
for a better day
that never came
or came and went.
The last thought will be
of almosts
while the lump that beats in your throat
sinks to your heart
and death dilutes you.

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Kevin

"Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there."

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Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

1 posted 2000-01-22 10:06 PM

Excellently expressed, Kevin. Truth becomes you.

Claire

poetry_kills
Senior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 549
new orleans

2 posted 2000-01-22 10:54 PM

very well put and vivid... two thumbs up

sincerely,
jerome the boy with no brain

A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2000-01-22 11:13 PM

Kevin-

So much truth in what you write.
Your soul shows in this one for sure.
And if we only realize it ...
each and every soul is reflected
in your thoughts.

Sure sits home with this lady tonight.
My appreciation for the sharing.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 2000-01-22 11:15 PM

Whew! This one is right on the money. It's not the failures we regret....it's the attempts we didn't make.

There is nothing quite as bad
As the simple phrase "I wish I had....."

Good writing.

Kevin Taylor
Member

since 1999-12-23

Posts 185
near Vancouver, BC, Canada

5 posted 2000-01-22 11:18 PM

Thank you!

& Marge.. we are related in the dim dark past. Tindal is not a common name and somewhere in antiquity my ancestors and yours spelled it the same way. I was born a Tyndall. I'm a Taylor by adoption.
~

Kevin

"Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there."

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 2000-01-23 11:54 AM

Kevin...very wise words...I like

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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2000-01-23 02:02 PM

"Footfalls echo in the memory
Down the passage which we did not take
Towards the door we never opened
Into the rose-garden"
T.S. Eliot

This was very well done and so familiar I went looking for this quote. I like the way you write!

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