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I Miss You
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I Miss You |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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How can I tell you where do I begin I miss you not the walls you hide in I miss you But how do I explain I don't miss the heartache I don't miss the pain I don't miss the fighting or the troubles that we've had I miss us just being happy my heart feels sad I miss the way we were supposed to be -us against the world- not you against me. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
I can relate to your poem. Seems love changes sometimes and we long for what was. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent final stanza "I miss the way we were supposed to be -us against the world- not you against me." Like that a lot  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
You know I hate to follow Ruth. she and I are so very much in tune in our thinking. I too love the last stanza. Wonderful piece! |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Great poem. I am always comforted by reading such a soulful pience...thank you |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, SEA. I'm sure many can relate to this! Well done! Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Simply elegant. Corinne |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I like that last stanza, too. I also like the theme, love lost, wondering how things got turned around. Nice subject. Great approach. Marilyn - you gotta be fast if you're gonna beat Hootessa. |
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