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The Heavenly Wind (South Pacific Perspectives, Part 1)
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The Heavenly Wind (South Pacific Perspectives, Part 1) |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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Zeroes Swift drones escort The Heavenly Wind Over the Philippine Sea Gods free from human desire Pride of The Rising Sun The Divine Tempest Seeking, Searching, Hunting To die for the Emperor is to live forever Aftertaste of sake A warrior’s sash A warrior’s death Keep the plane steady A warrior’s sash A warrior’s death Death is light as a feather To die for the Emperor is to live forever Targets Sited below Backs to the sun In tight formation The Heavenly Wind descends To die for the Emperor is to live forever To die, to die, death, death Light as a feather But duty is Heavy as Lead To die for the Emperor is to live forever Is that flak? My escort is Flaming debris Death is light as a feather But duty is heavy Heavy as lead Steady, Steady To die for the Emperor is to live forever Descending Diving, diving, steady Death is light as a feather Death is light, heavy, too Steady, steady, flames, blood, Follow the tracers, follow the tracers, To die for the Emperor is to die For the Emperor is to live I’m dying. Steady, steady Follow the tracers Closer, closer To die Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This is excellent, Jim. So finely crafted As usual! Unique perspective it is!  Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
You write a mean free verse Jim Nicely done!! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
WOW! This defies every introspective piece I have ever read -- I could feel it all happening at light speed, in the space of an instant! And what a twist at the end -- slipped it in there while I wasn't looking! There is a fine line between honor and folly, and dead is dead no matter what ... --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Thanks everyone. I've learned quite a bit from all of you (reading your work even if I don't comment everytime). Kess, I'm not sure I fully understand what you mean by your reply but it is clearly a compliment. Thanks. P.S. Check out the new title, btw (Senior Member -- heh-heh, beat you to it, Kess).  Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Indeed you did, my friend -- but then how many of those 500 were actually POETRY? hehehe You started it! ;OP --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Kess: 10:1 Total Post/Originating Post ratio here, dear. I guess I'm a giver. Granted, you have written TWO double sestinas to my ... er ... zero ... but, hey, the point is I got to 500 first (neener, neener, neener ... sound familiar?).  And the vast majority of those where Philosophy Forum diatribes and Critical Analyses ... whew!Come to think of it, YOU started it with the neener, neener, neener stuff in Nan's classroom, getting me in trouble with the teacher! P.S. I'm working on my first personification work now ... look for it soon, substitute teacher lady. Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
And I thought you were posting every 5 to 10 minute`s on your own writing`s so that you could keep them out front? I see now,you were doing that so that you could get to your #500 post. Just kiddin Jim Congrat. and keep sharing [This message has been edited by SnglDad (edited 01-21-2000).] |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
First - This is quite an exceptional poem... You've captured a devastating moment in history quite artfully.... Now - about your comments - Jim and Kess... If you can't behave out in public, I'm keeping you both in for recess... Stop your bickering... Jim... Get that double Sestina written... Kess.... um... is all your work done again??? Stop picking on Jim and find something to do then......  |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Great one Jim ! Looking forward to your "personification" ! LOL, never noticed my "title" changed. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
(pouting) Yes, Nan ... (sticking out tongue at Jim when Nan's back is turned) hehehe --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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