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when the moon glowed red
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when the moon glowed red |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
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-when the moon glowed red- Between two trees and The sound of planes, Slow shadow travels. Dull shining, Then bright as moonlit glass (borrowed sunlight). Darker at its tinge than the night sky, Lower half god-hidden In curved starlessness. Skyhigh upward facing crescent, Downturned side black, Spreading a million gallons of frozen ink. In front of me, a pool lit by underwater lights, Reflections from sequined coils around tree trunks. Its surface except for shadows false. (I remember when I was a boy in church, Every light reflection was a laser Or iridescent insect caught in my frames. When I moved my head, The lasers would travel through whole pews. People not realizing they were now shot. Secular against the sacred. I used to will the altar candles to jump. Sometimes the flames followed my instructions.) A bright sliver now perched against a treetop. The lowest branches like sculpted piles of light. The uppermost risen to abstract darkness. Now like a smile, then nothing. I imagine I see a dark smudge. Only clouds. "Maybe it fell out of the sky and into the pool," a child says to his mother. Finally, the patchwork banks roll away. The moon is reddish hewn, A planet more than a satellite. Far removed from the treetops and floating freely, beautifully, shared. |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Excellent way of showing how observent you are  Wonderful piece |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like you already. Thanks. Beautiful eclipse by the way, for those who might have missed it. I'm not sure where it was visible from besides the west coast, but it was worth being a little cold for.Mike |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderfully descriptive...and here I was working and missed it  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Lovely description!! And yes...I missed it too Ruth!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike- Your poem is almost as lovely as the eclipse itself. In the clear skies of the Florida night the beauty of the event was clearly and delightfully viewed. Your ~telescoping pen ~ magnified it with brillance. Thank you for capturing it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful poem, thanks for the view! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It was a wonderous sight, wasn't it. I enjoyed the view your poem gave as well, maybe more. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I too missed the view but you showed me one just as lovely. Thankyou so much for filling me in on what I missed. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I nearly froze solid, but I saw it and what an awesome sight it was! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ah, someone who was there...She said burn ... together. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How cool is this poem..... wow...I am glad I didnt miss this... very unique and clever write of imagery, metaphor and analogy...love the flashbacks of your church memories..they added a whole nother realm and angle to this. Some night when insomnia wins...I need to play in the archives and find some of your older posts again, I recall some awesome stuff from the early days of 6-7-8 and so on. But then awesome poests always write awesome "stuff"  How long can a girl be haunted by you ... |
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