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Vampire'sMistress
Junior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 19

0 posted 2000-01-20 06:07 PM

Glass Between Us

seeing your lips moving
bearing word for word
but absorbed by this inpenetrable
glass between us
dying
unheard unheard unheard

trying hard to catch them
and to give a signal back
but hidden behind
this icecold wall
you neither feel nor see my tears
for sorrow fall

i miss u miss what we had before and
i miss u miss what we had before but
i cant ignore - the silence

mirror-like reflections
of my mute screaming eyes
the truth burning inside
my shattering cinder heart
though it
cries cries cries

why does hurt destroy me
and not this evil emptiness
but hidden behind
this invsible wall
you neither feel nor see my tears
for sorrow fall

and i miss u miss what we had before
and i miss u miss what we had before
but i cant ignore - the silence

Carpe Noctem,

VM

( for more details about me refer to my very first poem in the DarkPassion Forum )

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

1 posted 2000-01-20 06:12 PM

I think OP serves you well, your style is very unique, liked it alot!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Vampire'sMistress
Junior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 19

2 posted 2000-01-21 04:10 AM

Thank you so much devina.
I know most people do not like this style, but sometimes I wanna feel free in what I do, without taking care for the common rules.
I know that I still have a lot to learn -reading your poems as well as from all of you here will help me.

Have a nice day, let the sun shine in your heart,

VM

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2000-01-21 08:25 AM

Ohhh My I love this, this is absolutley beautiful! love your style looking forward to reading more

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

spiked
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

4 posted 2000-01-21 11:14 AM

Style should be from the writers perspective and the reader should take from it what is given. The poem is beautiful and sad thank you.
Continue to write as you feel. True writing has no rules.

JD
Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 61
N Prov

5 posted 2000-01-21 11:52 AM

Strage but i like it

JD

Everything Dies

Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

6 posted 2000-01-21 01:21 PM

Liking this much! Good story, artfully rendered, VM!

--Kess

Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...

--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Vampire'sMistress
Junior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 19

7 posted 2000-01-21 04:16 PM

thx all
i did not expect so positive comments
Carpe Noctem,

VM

One Who Understands
Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa

8 posted 2000-01-21 04:19 PM

You have a very unique style of writing.

I enjoyed this piece very much

Vampire'sMistress
Junior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 19

9 posted 2000-01-22 08:39 AM

thank you One.
I enjoy your pieces as well - especially this one for your friend.

Cheers,

VM

~our lifes are nothing but words written with a stick in water~

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