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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Thrust < !signature-->Into thine heart thus of that mighty Hearth Rendered as a plowshare my sword my soul Amen How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (edited 01-20-2000).] |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Beautiful...This is a very powerful work LR Different from your usual and well layered. Simply Beautiful Would you like it to be more? "Thrust into thine heart thus, that mighty hearth, rendered a plowshare as my sword; My soul, Amen" Now its perfect...*S* ~haze "I shall leave nothing before matchsticks." |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very nice indeed  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thank you for the slice haze -- I shall ponder it scratching my chin whiskers!  Thank you wise Hoot! (and he shamelessly bumps it to top dialoging with his critics! and points out that being on the bottom is just as good) |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
very deep, very good, very you |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Very elegantly stated. A departure from your norm but beautiful nonetheless. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
The fastest way to a man's heart is through his sternum....hm wait, nevermind hehe. Great poem LR! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well - This one makes me think - and read several times.... My rule of thumb is that if you write something that demands I read it more than once, you've succeeded.....  I rather like your centered format.... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thank you Nan, Wild, Echo... I apreciate you reading and commenting. I've always considered it a challenge to paint a broad concept with a very small brush stroke... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Romance at it's fullest LR, I do believe you've beat me with this one Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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