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PhaerieChild
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Aloha, Oregon

0 posted 2000-01-20 03:12 AM


There, that's better. Ahh comfort!
No, don't move. Stop!! that tickles!!
There, okay, that's perfect.
I can feel your heartbeat.

Thundering in your chest.
It sounds so soothing but..
Stop!! That tickles!!
Thank you...much better.

What? Oh honey, I love you too.
I hear your tummy growlin'.
Are you hungry? Want a sandwich?
Okay, I'll just try to sleep.

Alright!! Enough already!!
Stop it!! It tickles!
No wait!! It isn't your chest hair.
I thought it was....I'm sorry.

It was your love just tickling my heart.


 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



© Copyright 2000 Shawna R. Holder - All Rights Reserved
Echo Rhayne
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Canyon Country, CA
1 posted 2000-01-20 03:14 AM


Awwwww this is beautiful!!  heartwarming and touching!!!


 ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~



Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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2 posted 2000-01-20 06:40 AM


Just so lovely!

Created a perfect moment of shared love - well done, WC!



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
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3 posted 2000-01-20 06:44 AM


This really is so sweet...gave me a smile this morning...nicely done!

Dear LadyClaire



hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 2000-01-20 10:09 AM


this is cute, it made me smile  
PhaerieChild
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5 posted 2000-01-20 10:50 AM


Echo...thank you for your kind words

Severn...I do have to admit that these shared moments are special to me. Thank you

Claire and Ruth...I'm glad I could evoke a smile. Thanks for for your replies.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



PhaerieChild
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6 posted 2000-01-20 10:50 AM


Echo...thank you for your kind words

Severn...I do have to admit that these shared moments are special to me. Thank you

Claire and Ruth...I'm glad I could evoke a smile. Thanks for for your replies.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
7 posted 2000-01-20 10:54 AM


Me and my dirty mind.  I didn't expect it to turn mushy...

Very nice work here  

PhaerieChild
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Aloha, Oregon
8 posted 2000-01-20 11:27 AM


To be honest Rebel when I first set out on this piece it was to be written for the adult forum. While I don't post there often I thought "What the hey?" Sometimes things just don't turn out that way, so mushy it is lol

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Denise
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9 posted 2000-01-20 12:25 PM


Mushy but oh so sweet!  

Denise

Earthtones
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10 posted 2000-01-20 12:51 PM



Thanks, that was very sweet, it gave me a warm glow inside.

PhaerieChild
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Aloha, Oregon
11 posted 2000-01-20 09:32 PM


Denise and Earthtones....thanx for all your kind words. I sometimes like mushy/sweet.
Sorta like a sticky bun. Mushy and oh so sweet!!! LOL I think I hear my kitchen calling me...

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Balladeer
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12 posted 2000-01-20 11:20 PM


Mushy is good. The world needs more mushy!!!!
SEA
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13 posted 2000-01-21 01:28 AM


You have to love the sweetness of this poem!-SEA
One Who Understands
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14 posted 2000-01-21 02:16 AM


After that last line...I was filled with "HOW SWEET"

Truly a sweet poem...I hope someday I will have a wife who will say something like that to me

devina
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since 1999-10-28
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Cali
15 posted 2000-01-21 02:38 AM


AAWWW!! Now were all get mushy in here!!! Cute poem Shawna!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Martie
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16 posted 2000-01-22 08:00 PM


This is precious.
Songbird
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17 posted 2000-01-22 09:48 PM


Very sweet, we all need our hearts tickled!
PhaerieChild
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Aloha, Oregon
18 posted 2000-01-23 10:16 AM


'Deer...I agree, mushy is good

Sea...thanks for reading and the compliment.

One Who Understands...It takes kissin' a bunch of toads to get a prince (or princess) but when it happens it is bliss.

Devina, Martie and Septsong, thanks for your kind words. We all need to be tickled occasionally.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
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Wyoming
19 posted 2000-01-23 10:21 AM


WildChild,  hate to be repetitive, but this was sweet.  Really enjoyed the read.  Thanks.  
Tramp Poet
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20 posted 2000-01-23 01:01 PM


mushy and sweet, from my sister?
oh, the end is near...
Loved the piece, sis
made me jealous of the muffin man, again!
Love y'all,
b


  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10

Bad Boy
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 78

21 posted 2000-01-23 01:34 PM


Well Im glad you weren`t saying this during ....well you know.
Me and my Bad Boy way`s had a different ending before I had even finished reading.
Very sweet



 The Devil Made Me Do It.


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