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It Tickles
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It Tickles |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon 
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There, that's better. Ahh comfort! No, don't move. Stop!! that tickles!! There, okay, that's perfect. I can feel your heartbeat. Thundering in your chest. It sounds so soothing but.. Stop!! That tickles!! Thank you...much better. What? Oh honey, I love you too. I hear your tummy growlin'. Are you hungry? Want a sandwich? Okay, I'll just try to sleep. Alright!! Enough already!! Stop it!! It tickles! No wait!! It isn't your chest hair. I thought it was....I'm sorry. It was your love just tickling my heart. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Awwwww this is beautiful!! heartwarming and touching!!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Just so lovely! Created a perfect moment of shared love - well done, WC!  'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This really is so sweet...gave me a smile this morning...nicely done!  Claire |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
this is cute, it made me smile |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Echo...thank you for your kind words Severn...I do have to admit that these shared moments are special to me. Thank you Claire and Ruth...I'm glad I could evoke a smile. Thanks for for your replies. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Echo...thank you for your kind words Severn...I do have to admit that these shared moments are special to me. Thank you Claire and Ruth...I'm glad I could evoke a smile. Thanks for for your replies. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Me and my dirty mind. I didn't expect it to turn mushy... Very nice work here  |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
To be honest Rebel when I first set out on this piece it was to be written for the adult forum. While I don't post there often I thought "What the hey?" Sometimes things just don't turn out that way, so mushy it is lol Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Mushy but oh so sweet! Denise |
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Earthtones Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 10 |
Thanks, that was very sweet, it gave me a warm glow inside. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Denise and Earthtones....thanx for all your kind words. I sometimes like mushy/sweet. Sorta like a sticky bun. Mushy and oh so sweet!!! LOL I think I hear my kitchen calling me... Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Mushy is good. The world needs more mushy!!!! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
You have to love the sweetness of this poem!-SEA |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
After that last line...I was filled with "HOW SWEET" Truly a sweet poem...I hope someday I will have a wife who will say something like that to me |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
AAWWW!! Now were all get mushy in here!!! Cute poem Shawna!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is precious. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Very sweet, we all need our hearts tickled! |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
'Deer...I agree, mushy is good Sea...thanks for reading and the compliment. One Who Understands...It takes kissin' a bunch of toads to get a prince (or princess) but when it happens it is bliss. Devina, Martie and Septsong, thanks for your kind words. We all need to be tickled occasionally. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
WildChild, hate to be repetitive, but this was sweet. Really enjoyed the read. Thanks. |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
mushy and sweet, from my sister? oh, the end is near... Loved the piece, sis made me jealous of the muffin man, again! Love y'all, b there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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Bad Boy Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 78 |
Well Im glad you weren`t saying this during ....well you know. Me and my Bad Boy way`s had a different ending before I had even finished reading.  Very sweet  The Devil Made Me Do It. |
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