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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-01-19 08:39 PM


The Lament

Gliding in on fog's whispers, come to me, come to me,
enchanting song do sing, come to me, come to me,
mystery as to what it is you will bring, come to me,
following me to my vespers, come to me.

At the seventh hour I shall pray, come to me, come to me,
enchanting song do again sing, come to me, come to me,
forth will come everything you bring, come to me
changing night to dawn of day, come to me.

Ah dear keeper of my heart, come to me, come to me,
forever I've prayed we never part, come to me, come to me,
your entrancing song, your mysteries, come to me,
left me blind so I can see, come to me.

I only know the night from the cool it brings, come to me
hiding from the day's rays, abandoned, come to me,
singing your song, knowing now the mystery, come to me, come to me
praying you stay for all eternity, come to me, come to me.

Now you've come, engulfing me, come to me, come to me,
with your fog's breath, lift me high, come to me, come to me,
While I pray, come to me
Let me breathe my last breath on your face, and leave.

23 August, 1999
©KRJ



 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 2000-01-19 10:18 PM


Wow!!! The repetition in this gets the message across loud and clear and ads that extra punch to the final line. Well done
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 2000-01-19 10:29 PM


Sunshine,
Now this one could be put to music!
It's truly a beautiful poem
From beginning to end
Liz

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3 posted 2000-01-19 10:33 PM


Sunshine-
That's pretty gosh-darned awesome.
I'm glad you posted it so that I
got a chance to read and re-read it.
It is lyrically lovely.
~*Marge*~

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Denise
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4 posted 2000-01-19 10:33 PM


Oh, Sunshiine, this is excellent! I, too, loved the repetition! Wonderful!  
Pepper
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5 posted 2000-01-20 08:06 AM


I really like this too Sunshine....beautiful writing here
Wonderful!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



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6 posted 2000-01-20 09:11 AM


Hoot, a comment such as this from you leaves me humbled...thank you...

Liz, I had hoped you would enjoy it...thank you...

Marge, I'm enjoying "awesome", thanks! (~,^}

denise, Pepper, as always, so glad to see you came in for the read.



 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



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