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The Lament [Repost for Elizabeth]
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The Lament [Repost for Elizabeth] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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The Lament Gliding in on fog's whispers, come to me, come to me, enchanting song do sing, come to me, come to me, mystery as to what it is you will bring, come to me, following me to my vespers, come to me. At the seventh hour I shall pray, come to me, come to me, enchanting song do again sing, come to me, come to me, forth will come everything you bring, come to me changing night to dawn of day, come to me. Ah dear keeper of my heart, come to me, come to me, forever I've prayed we never part, come to me, come to me, your entrancing song, your mysteries, come to me, left me blind so I can see, come to me. I only know the night from the cool it brings, come to me hiding from the day's rays, abandoned, come to me, singing your song, knowing now the mystery, come to me, come to me praying you stay for all eternity, come to me, come to me. Now you've come, engulfing me, come to me, come to me, with your fog's breath, lift me high, come to me, come to me, While I pray, come to me Let me breathe my last breath on your face, and leave. 23 August, 1999 ©KRJ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow!!! The repetition in this gets the message across loud and clear and ads that extra punch to the final line. Well done  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sunshine, Now this one could be put to music! It's truly a beautiful poem From beginning to end Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sunshine- That's pretty gosh-darned awesome. I'm glad you posted it so that I got a chance to read and re-read it. It is lyrically lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Oh, Sunshiine, this is excellent! I, too, loved the repetition! Wonderful!  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I really like this too Sunshine....beautiful writing here Wonderful! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hoot, a comment such as this from you leaves me humbled...thank you... Liz, I had hoped you would enjoy it...thank you... Marge, I'm enjoying "awesome", thanks! (~,^} denise, Pepper, as always, so glad to see you came in for the read. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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