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Rewsponse to Toe's repost of a fictional Balladeer poem!
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Rewsponse to Toe's repost of a fictional Balladeer poem! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Well, Toe, my friend, I must agree I've learned some things, all right. I've learned so much of poetry Since you've been on this site. I used to think that it was right, At least some of the time, That, when one writes a rhyming poem, The words are supposed to rhyme!! You blew away that fallacy And proved it so untrue. Now I know "door" and "hard" DO rhyme And it's all thanks to you. I used to think it added to A poem and made it sweeter If one would take the time to try To use some kind of meter. How wrong I was!!! There is no need To make the lines seem fluid. Just chop them up like Lizzie B. And write like Toe the Druid! And, finally, I thought it good If, even by pretense, One took the time and effort to Write something that made sense. Oh, boy!! Now, how naiive was that?! Those years I spent so blind! When all I had to do was write Like I had lost my mind! Thank you, Toe. You freed me from Those silly rules I knew. I'm getting a lobotomy So I can write like you!!!! |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Excellent rewsponce, Ballads.  Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
lol what a perfect response |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So nice to see you guys back at it again. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I am freed as well, to do a writers bidding, I can let it all hang out, just kidding! Enjoyed reading this. I like your sense of humor! DH |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
LOL!  I needed that! And all this time I was struggling horribly with the same things, and now I know I don't have to! What a relief. *whew*  May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
All that rhyme and meter... and the guy can't spell worth a damn!! What a rewsponse, Deer! *G* |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, Suthern girl, it makes my day Each time you join into the fray I know you follow Toe so close When he stops quick, you break your nose. I do admire, though, your devotion And your misguided strong emotion. If a typo fills you with such glee, Accept it happily from me |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yep, like I said, a laugh a minute!!!  |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Balladeer: Now that you have a clearer understanding of poetry... when do we get to read the new you? I remember you once saying that you would never post your worst. Well?, with the new and improved you writing in the Toerag poetic format when do we get to read it? |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I agree with Sir Andrew..When do we get to see the new syle of the great one? You should do him the honor since he fought so galently beside you in the veggie wars. I do believe he sustained a serious injery in that battle. Isn't that right Andrew? You took a hit during a cheery raid? I believe that is correct...lol. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ok, Andrew. Here it is.... Hello, there folks, my name is Toerag I escaped from a Russian gulag I am a professor of foto-graphy And I write poetry for a laughie. My friend is LongJohn. He's a sailor And Suthern wishes I would nail her Balladeer's my one true mentor Nan chases me with her eraser. I found a home right here at Passions And I'll stay here for the long duration They like my pottery, you see and that tickles the s**t out of me! waddayathink, Andrew? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
ROFLMAO...well, I'm glad I mentioned that one Hey, I didn't think it sounded like you, but I have my bad days too (more than good some times...lol) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer- These little poetic frays get more vivid everyday. I, for one, just love the pace of you two guys, in each other's face. Balladeer, what you have here, is a whopping dose, of what comes close to being your best ~deer~. It's always fun and rhyming folly to see you both so very jolly. I hope that Toe and you, both go head to head in the ring. While we all sit at ringside and laugh at the main event. Now where do we get tickets? Love ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
LMBO!! Thanks for the laughs! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Balladeer, You never cease to amaze me With you stunning doses of reality. Whether its a rollcoaster, or simply a boaster. You touch me With your poetry. Much thanks. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Good response Mike....and unlike mine...it's not fiction....By the way, I can't write poetry, or make "pottery".... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a "ruesponse..." ROTFLOL! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Great poems 'Deer. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
L I B! Dar it B! Balladeer's Wurst poetree Butt that still b some gud wordin' yal' put dwn. Yo Marilyn: Yep I tuk a hit or three in the cherry patch, but it made for some dang good pie. Perhaps some day I'll go back to that hollowed ground and pay my respects to all the veggies that lost their peels in that horrible war. How I remember it like it were just four months ago... Lt. Lucie... Special Agent Mr. Cucumber... The Cabbage Patch Kids... and lets not forget Arti-choke the assassin. How I miss them all. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
LoL, this is great!! However I never thought, hmmmm nevermind, I never think, hurts too much. Forget I said anything hehe Great poem! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Do not miss me Andrew dear, though I've been hiding, I'm still here. I'm working on a masterpiece. 3 lines done, wonders never cease. I may not see all that goes on do not forget me, I'm not gone. I'm coming back to kick some butt. they'll all be saying "What the ...umm".. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I think I need a bigger eraser.......  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
LOLOL |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Oh how I long for the peaceful days I once knew, when Toe and 'Deer would cast longing glances at each other's poetry. Please try to get along, fellas. psst, 'Deer. I think Toe is out to get you and should never be trusted. psst, Toe. I think 'Deer is out to get you and should never be trusted. |
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