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A Silver Medal Eulogy (The Sonnet or Free-Verse) (repost from CA)
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A Silver Medal Eulogy (The Sonnet or Free-Verse) (repost from CA) |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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I lay this silver medal on your chest But, though I know what silver represents, I’ll never think of you as second best. In times reserved for youthful innocence, My ignorance of serious consequence Concealed my sense of mortal weakness. Now All veils are vanquished, leaving no defense Against this gift new knowledge does endow. That even now my earnest, tear filled vow Is shattered, battered by this awful truth: I might forget you. With a furrowed brow I think of you and troubled days of youth, And hope that passing time does not upend Undying friendship for a dying friend. *** And now free-verse: *** My dearest friend they said you fell and I too young naïve to worry went about my summer play. You would be okay. But now I lay this silver medal on your chest and though I know what silver represents I’ll never think of you as second best. Those times are gone times for youthful innocence and ignorant bliss a shield from pains of life and death. You were not okay. So now I lay this silver medal on your chest and though I know what silver represents I’ll never think of you as second best. You saw me win that silver medal, cheered me on One more! One more! and when I lost and hung my head in shame you said, It will be okay. Although I wore that silver medal on my chest and knowing what that silver represents you never thought of me as second best. But even now my tear filled vow is shattered, battered by an awful, guilty fear. Not of living life without you, no a fear more fierce: I fear I might forget you. With tears, I lay this silver medal on your chest and though I know what silver represents I vow to never think of you as second best. Fifteen years have passed and thinking back of summers silver medals and best friends I smiled. I did not forget you. I laid that silver medal on your chest and though I knew what silver represents I never thought of you as second best. Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! Liked them both! Good job!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
jbouder, Both are excellent. You write very well. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very touching and well written both. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Jim, A talented young poet, both in structured and free verse. Both were excellent Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
They are both beautifully touching. Job well done! And the love displayed for your friend in them gets a gold medal from me! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Jim- Your free verse version unleashed a torrent of tears of sweet remembrance. Through the tears I struggled, for I had such a friend. She never thought she stood a chance of vying for the medals. She lost her life fighting cancer through her tender years of 16-22. She touched my life with an awareness of God and his purpose in our lives. She wears the medals of my love for her courage and her faith. She stood on the podium always with a smile as her ~medal~. Her name is Shelly. She will always wear the winners medal in my heart. She gave more than she took. She made sure I'd never forget her. Eighteen years have passed ... and I haven't forgotten her for a moment. *Jim, thank you so much for this beauty. God bless you. Love ~Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
You already know my feelings on these two. You have my utmost respect with these  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Freeverse! Only the freeverse! haha - just being cheeky...very fine pieces the both of them Jim. Well done! K |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Everyone: Thanks for your kindness here. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Marge: I'm particularly pleased that this evoked memories of your friend. God bless you. Jim |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What... You're trying to slip this gem onto page two without comment from me??.. I think not... They're both quite exceptional, my friend.. I've come to look forward to your next postings with bated breath... |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Nan: All you have to do to get a sneak preview is stick you nose in Brad's Den (CA) from time to time. Bated breath, huh? Thank you, my dear teacher. Jim |
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