Open Poetry #5 |
Nocturne |
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Nocturne Alien imbues my room, soundlessly supple, shapelessly shifting, nocturnally natural. Under blanket of sleep, my dull dreams vanish, slyly supplanting its own, vibrancy filling in gray. Vast sigh steeping breast, whirlwind in my mind, giant in a small space, bellowing joviality. Bearing intrinsic truths, visiting nearly nightly, no longer afraid am I, no longer alone am I. Humming a familiar tune antique nursery rhyme, fingering smile on lips, shushing bothered brow. Olden tales it tells, fanciful and erotic, but finales are mine, quixotic suppressions. Surrendering a bit, in return for this gift, replenishing serenity with one wise whisper. Visitor nocturnal, vanquishing fears, licking up tears, laughter replete. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great poem, Corinne, "intrisic truths" ... "quixotic suppressions" love the word choice. Michael |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very unique, I loved it!! Take Care Bridgette |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, You paint with a full palette, I enjoyed. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Corrine! This gave me such a wonderful feeling of peace! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Corinne, I enjoyed reading this fine poem. Liked your alliteration and unusual phrasings. Claire |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Denise, for all your kinds words! Thanks, meadowmuse, I do lean heavily on alliteration, huh? This, to me, seems like the strangest thing I've written. Oh, well! Corinne |
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catslair Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 48 |
some great lines in this......like licking up tears.......loved that.......thankyou for the wonderful read....... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Enjoyed, thanks for the read! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice flow to this one |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corrine- I just like this so very much. After a couple of re-reads ... it still goes down mellow. Beautifully flowing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Absolutely wonderful - lovely. K 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
This is not strange its deep, youare obviously reaching new levels of your soul, keep digging and keep writing. And I'll keep digging it and reading |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very beautifully written, indeed A little treasure Liz |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, this is a wonderfull piece, I don't understand it all, and I probably made some wrong assumptions in my wicked little mind, but I sure loved it whatever hidden meanings it has. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Catslair, Echo Rhayne, Hoot_Owl_M and Severn: Thank you! Marge, I thank you for rereading it. Mellow is the feeling I'd hope for...a voice inside of us that says: "its going to be okay." Paul: You are very perceptive! Elizabeth - thank you, I was very unsure of this one. And last but not least, Parker: I'd sure love to hear some of those wicked assumptions! (grinning) Corinne |
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